Puzzle Pieces

Puzzle Pieces

 

Complete me

I’m missing pieces

Pieces you fit

Every little piece

 

So I’m confused

A little insecure

Scared of opening up

Taking you

And completing my puzzle

 

This image has been incomplete

I have no idea

What the picture is

But I know you can

Finish it off

Finish me off

 

Come to me

Wrap your arms around me

Make me feel safe

Give me a home

I tire and dread

This homelessness

 

Make me feel wanted

Needed

Desired

I’m pleading

I want you

I need you

You’re desired

All by me

 

Maybe I’m selfish

Using your pieces

To complete my own

But maybe

Just maybe

I’m your puzzle

And you’re my pieces

And together

We can complete the image

With our puzzle pieces

Reviews

[Caradoc]

Now this really made me smile. I fully enjoyed this one, right until the very end. The puzzle metaphor is excellent, if a little cliche. However, I think that a cliche is what it is for a reason. It's a concept that many people can identify with and pass on to others.

Of the whole thing, I enjoyed the last three stanzas the most and I'm still debating which of them I like the best. This makes me think of a song by one of my favorite bands. If you would care to check them out, the song is called "In The Dark", by Sonata Arctica. It's like this poem could have been inspired by a line in that song.

"I wanna be so close to you.
See whatever scars you carry
Within your broken heart.
Mine's your missing part."

Wonderful piece.

-Caradoc

[C.]

I really liked this (: I could relate to it a lot

[w]

The first 3 stanzas don't flow so well. The pacing is off and I would take another look at your line breaks to allow it to flow smoother. The rest of the piece is wonderful.

[Antonio Valentino]

this was great.. sometimes i just bite off a piece to make it fit but thats just me..

i hope you complete your puzzle soon

:)

[Kes]

I love this poem. The last stanza in particular grabs me. :)
Great write!
K

[Celestial Witch Child]

I feel like this has potential, I'm just not crazy about it in its current state. I know it's the theme of the whole poem, but the overuse of "pieces" just kills this all for me.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. I like the use of the puzzle to make your point. Nice flow of thought and I like the desire at the end. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[John Stussy]

Beautiful, the intentions of this poem are warm and appealing. It'd be impossible to deny such a request so tenderly put, from such a cool, awesome lass. The words flow well, your imagery is flawless. I hope completeness happens for you one day. Thank you for sharing your wonderful words, as always, it was a pleasure to read!

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

Completing a puzzle means also patience and a good feeling in the end. The picture as a whole it is a good one.

[Michael G.]

Well done!
There are many pieces to the puzzles. Careful with each piece, so you won't misplace a single one.
Good read.