Hookers Wings

Another poem written late, tell me what you think! I tried having some sort of format with this one haha

Hookers Wings

 

She’s got the body of a hooker

And the face of an angel

You let your hormones take over

Wanna turn the good girl bad

 

Honey, behind that face

Is only bad

You think you ache now?

Wait a few more minutes

You’ll be bursting at the seams

 

You can’t corrupt the corrupted

She’s got tricks up her sleeves

And secrets under her clothes

Questions in her eyes

And answers outlining her lips

 

Sweetie, behind that smile

Is one big grin

You think she’s hard to resist now?

Wait a few more minutes

You’ll want to devour her

 

You can’t dominate the dominant

She has power over you

And strength in her petiteness

Landscapes in her curves

And heaven deep inside her

 

She’s got the body of a hooker

And the face of an angel

You let your hormones take over

Wanna try the good girl gone bad

Reviews

[Bewitching Sensations]

nice :) womans power is amazing.. not good if n the hands of a bad woman though

[Jack Frost]

super sexy- luv it!

[Ian H Morrison]

oh yes this good i like the way you have run it all together with humour and sexy sassyness

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I like this, since behind every innocent face there's a bad side to that person! Well, that's my opinion. This is different and really good actually. I like the title it fits the poem very well! Haha.

"Wanna try the good girl gone bad" is my favorite line, since that seems like something I'd say in the future! XD


Ashley Rivers-- Keep writing! :D

[w]

This felt a bit trite, but that is just my .02

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem. I like the story in this poem. Never trust the appearance. You can get a surprise.
"Landscapes in her curves
And heaven deep inside her"
A woman can twist a man to anything when he fall into her control. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

I think this woman is not hiding at all. One of the most cruel human prejudices is that against innocent beautiful women. I need to say the truth aloud this time. From my whole life experience the devilish women are also ugly and the graceful ones are victims, not victims of prostitution, but victims of different abuses. I really met nice good women like that, having a horrible fate. Worse than Snow White or Cinderella. Here I think that this woman in your poem is not guilty at all, she is imprisoned in her body, like all of us are. Me, I was not always perfect, for example I always disliked very much hookers and only late in life I understood from the mature point of view their positive role in the society and the fact that they are less sinful than others. Of course your poem is not a moral lesson and this time I wrote too much.
I will write a little about your poem - although hookers are not the dominant part of women race, the rhymes go well and the poem as a whole has the power to impress. You have the ability to use questions or negative sentences or straight conclusions in a dominant manner. This is your advantage. Also your usual use of diminutives adds some harmony and irony in this fantasy poem. And after all what I liked the most about your poem is that nowhere is stated that this woman is a hooker, for the contrary she is not. She just has the body of a hooker, this is something else.
Your monologue seems to resemble that of an old woman matronizing an innocent boy.

[Johnny Joe]

i like the under theme of this poem. the devil of a woman hiding behind that sweet Innocent angel face :)

[Celestial Witch Child]

Nice write... Perhaps revise "body of a hooker." I feel this would be miles better if you used a different comparison and left it to the reader's imagination.

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

You can’t dominate the dominant
She has power over you
And strength in her petiteness
Landscapes in her curves
And heaven deep inside her

....................written well. with regards.