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I feel a sense of injustice

The right things seem to be wrong

Things that are up, tumble down

Laughter turns into tears

Smiling into frowns

There’s nothing to do now

Sadness eats you alive

Regret makes a comeback

Depression never leaves

Happiness never reveals itself

Anger hits like a ton of bricks

You scream for help, but no one cares

Pain finds its way through

You turn towards dark paths

“Get away” You say

But it only comes back stronger

Shake your head in disapproval at those who hurt you

You lose yourself in the thoughts that haunt you And fade into the clouds that crowd around you.

Reviews

[child of God]

This is amazing I love your writing your amazing writter

[Rose Marie]

This is oneof my favorites

[MinorArt]

I can really feel the sincerity and authenticity in your writing, I thoroughly enjoyed it

[Rose Marie]

Thank you!!

[jfdkslafnas]

The first five lines really caught my attention. They flowed beautifully. In some (most) of my pieces, I have either a strong beginning, middle, or end and the rest is weaker, but you wrote very consistently. Strong all the way through. Great job!

One thing I noticed and forgot to mention earlier is the last two lines. Now maybe this is just a pet peeve or maybe I'm OCD, but the fact that the formatting is different there distracted me from the actual writing. Maybe put a space between them or put the previous lines together. I'm not sure if that makes sense. There's two sentences that didn't make in onto one line so you put a space between them but didn't for the last two.

But anyway, don't have to listen to me. Once again, great job!

[Rose Marie]

Thank you. I will fix that.

[Destiny Dreamer]

OH! That's a Sad yet GREAT piece. Really, it does happens to many of us in life, when there is no way to relief, everything just Hurts. Great write Dear.. Keep writing. Again, LOVE IT! :)

[Rose Marie]

Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!