The Light of Hope

Looking outside your window

recalling everything you've done

is like a story falling apart;

I can hear you.

The days before those events

feels like you only dreamed them,

even though you smiled the day before yesterday

your ground has crumbled beneath you.

All you wanted was for someone to hear you,

all you wanted was for someone to care,

but everything you once knew is taken away.

Sometimes when you scream someone's name

like a child's game play

seems like everyone's ears have gone deaf.

Sometimes you wait on a bench 

for someone to come around

to sit next to you and just listen.

But every word everyone says 

tears you apart,

and making it harder for you to stay,

so each day you'll slowly fade away

where no one is there to save you.

All you wanted was for someone to hear you,

all you wanted was for someone to care,

but everything you once knew is taken away.

Take my hand, my dear friend

I will walk with you through this storm

take a breath and know you are not alone,

I have been there,

skies so dark, with too much pain to bare,

close your eyes, and tell me your story,

I'm here to listen,

don't give up, everything will be alright

one day you'll see the glimpse of light.

I can hear your call for help,

so speak to me, speak to me

just speak.

All you wanted was for someone to hear you,

all you wanted was for someone to care,

but everything you once knew is taken away.

(I can hear you,

I'm here for you,

don't give up)

Reviews

[Relic]

You've written a sad tale that leaves one in silent thought.

This is not a critique but I'd like to make a suggestion. The word 'seemed' is a weak word and shows the reader that you're hesitant, not sure or confident in your thoughts. I would try to replace those words. Mentioning them three times weighs down the poem and the lines.

[Mika =^-^=]

Thank you. I'll try to replace those words.

[Priyanshi]

You had portrayed it so well..... so good

[Mika =^-^=]

thank you. ^^

[writ rajat]

Very nice to read this ons

[B]

A human soul crying for help
Is there anyone out there
Listening
or has it all turned cold