A new blooming Love

he was there to cheer me up .... to be my partner at the Prom... Thank you so much.

Everyone seems so happy

As they dance so gracefully

Tonight the ladies bloom like flowers

And I was just standing there collecting dust in the corner

 

Watching the guys invite them makes me feel so sad

And the jealousy piles up in my heart

I want to scream so mad

As the pain stab me so hard

 

I was about to burst in tears

With the heavy feeling inside stirs

Suddenly he grabbed my hands

And hugged me where I stand

 

And he gently whispered to me

That no one will notice it

So it’s ok to cry on his shoulders

And that time I was a terrible sober

 

The loud music drown out my woes

While everyone is in cheers

He wiped my tears

And hold me like he’ll never let me go

 

As the night grow old sweetly

He asked me “Would you be my Muse tonight?”

I just nod and danced with him slowly

I knew that time, there’s a new love blooming in that dim light

Author's Note

I just want to write this one... and please tell me if there's something off... or wrong?.... it's just a draft.....

Reviews

[AHHHHHHHH! Heath.]

Very nice! Constructed nicely, simple yet elegant! BRAVO!

[Kuhr Gred]

wow.. i like very much ;)

[tk]

that's a really good narrative piece. :)
the story was sweet and romantic. there's something in it that makes it stand out from other love poems. maybe it's because of the emotions you've put in here.
LOVED IT!! :)))

[Sweets]

That's so sweet and lovely, loved the story in here :)

[Chris]

Des,

It's the neatest thing when you do good that absolutely nothing counts against it... you did good.

[Thea]

Glad to know someone cheered you up...Nice poem.

[Becky Clancy]

I thought your poem was really pretty :3 I especially love the title you came up for this poem :3 so cute ^^

[Jed Sabffle]

From its title, "A new blooming love"... your poem is blooming! :)
Terrific ideas end emotions! :D
maybe it needs some revisions in some lines.. nevertheless, it's fantastic.
I liked it! Great job! :DD

[A Risen Heroine.]

This is so beautiful!
Damn! I Loved it a thousand fold!
You did such a great job!
Hard to find such a boy haha.

~A Fallen Heroine~

[Gregory]

nothing wrong with it, mate, it's beautiful. Though a little too needy in my opinion, but I still love it. :)