Emptiness Within

I feel so empty like a doll.....

I was like a lady clad in doubt and confusion

With the face painted with a fixed smile

I’m slowly rotting away under this empty sky

With the beauty that never exist, an illusion

 

Like a fragile porcelain doll

I am disgorged by the elegant coffin

I am fading, both my heart and soul became dull

Even if I don’t have tears, I keep on crying

I open my eyes to bear the world’s darkness

And within myself, I feel so empty

I want to scowl to world around me

But I can’t for I’m a mannequin, emotionless

Author's Note

-.- it may not be that good ...... hehhehe

Reviews

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Love your use of metaphors here...
very evocative piece...
awesome poem :)

[rwar ish me]

I really loved this
I love darkness and stuff to do with this kind of writing.
Very nice
~Amai

[Lily Mae]

Sometimes we get so numb to the world we surely do feel like mannequins. but it's that heart and hope of love and life that keep us moving.. ;) well written..x

[Poeticpiers]

Who knows what mannequins get up to when the shop closes for the night?
I enjoyed the read which set my mind to wondering if shop models live a secret life

[Thea]

A fine piece of work...
But this..."I want to scowl to world around me"...is quite confusing...
I think the word "scowl" is a facial expression for disapproval or anger involving the brows...And, yah, that line is really confusing me...Especially "to scowl to world"... o.O
Anyway, nice poem.
:)))

[The Analog Kid]

You don't have to cry actual tears to be weeping inside. The mannequin is an apt representation of many people.

[tk]

:) loved how you expressed your thoughts through a mannequin..
very dark and powerful.. a stunning piece.. :)
♥♥♥

[Layla Anne Massaro]

I don't know what idea this poem wants to show the readers but I like the darkness that it has. Good job.