First

he's not my first man but he's my first love

You were not my first date

You were not my first kiss

You were not the first one who had me
You were not the first man

 

But...

 

You were the first who made me desperate

You were the first who brought me the bliss

You were the first who made me fall on my knees

You were the first man

 

 

You’re my First love

Though probably you don’t know it

 

 

Author's Note

first love...chuchu... honest opinion

Reviews

[paparapapa]

I seriously love the format and the colors! They reminded me of "Love Actually!" =)) Well, anyway, I agree with Jack Isaac that this one's a pure expression of one's thoughts and feelings. For a poem not adorned with those playful use of words and lovely rhymes, I think this one's pretty good. So great job on this one. :P

[Jack Isaac]

This is "expression of self" at it's best -- no dancing around the issue --no fancy prose --just the expression itself, as plain as day. The layout, in this case, is the thought provoking part. I like this, though maybe not unique in layout, the message is 100% Desmund Tiny. Nice write!

[Leslie Philibert]

Good poem.He`s a lucky guy !

[Jed Sabffle]

Very fantastic! :) Two thumbs up!

[Sophie]

I loved this, even the display makes it so powerful, wow.

[No name]

True emotion was expressed in this piece. Beautiful write, really enjoyed reading.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This poem was really nicely written. I loved the emotion within it. I can relate...:D
Thanks for sharing.

[Julia Mancini]

I liked the poem a great deal. It had so much raw emotion!

[Blake]

First of all, I loved the font and the red colored words. Random - but true.
The poem itself was very beautiful. It has a great amount of emotion in its wonderful flow. Great job

[Me]

this is a great write.