Please come back

Please come back

A Poem by Desmund Tiny
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I'll wait for you to comeback

"

I woke up with tears in my eyes
recalling what happened last night
I feel so cold as if I were inside the ice
And I realized you were not by my side

I called out your name again and again
you didn’t response and pierce my heart with pain
Like a thick wood, brick, metal or a stone

It hit me so hard that you were already gone

 

I just sat right in front of my door
hoping that you’ll come back and hold me more
Together forever, I’m just dreaming
Now my worst fear came, you left me

© 2011 Desmund Tiny


Author's Note

Desmund Tiny
I just wrote this because I remember someone in the past.........

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I decent poem about love lost and yearning for it to return. Nothing jumped out at me but I like it as a whole. Good work, keep on writing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I feel ya honey. It can be hard to remember those who you have lost. I know the pain.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is sad. I like the middles stanza, you did a very good job on this. keep it up.

Posted 12 Years Ago


So sad but so beautiful. It has nice rhythm and very easy to read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is sad but well written. Beautiful work Des...xx

Posted 12 Years Ago


A plaintive cry in the dark. Heartfelt and sad...thanks for sharing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


It's pretty upsetting... But it's good... It doesn't quite have a rhythm though... Watch the syllables and stuff... Just suggesting...

Posted 12 Years Ago


Yeah, this is kinda sad. But you did a great job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


this is sad,
I can relate to this very well.
It is a very nice write
And is well written.
~Amai

Posted 12 Years Ago


I can relate. i really like the "I feel so cold as if I were inside the ice" line well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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I just want the name "Desmund Tiny" because it is one of my favorite character in the Novel "Darren Shan" but you can call me Des. ^^, errr.. Hello to my old writings!~ wew it's been years I gues.. more..

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