Please come back

I'll wait for you to comeback

I woke up with tears in my eyes
recalling what happened last night
I feel so cold as if I were inside the ice
And I realized you were not by my side

I called out your name again and again
you didn’t response and pierce my heart with pain
Like a thick wood, brick, metal or a stone

It hit me so hard that you were already gone

 

I just sat right in front of my door
hoping that you’ll come back and hold me more
Together forever, I’m just dreaming
Now my worst fear came, you left me

Author's Note

I just wrote this because I remember someone in the past.........

Reviews

[Chris Taylor]

I decent poem about love lost and yearning for it to return. Nothing jumped out at me but I like it as a whole. Good work, keep on writing.

[Hunter.Hunted.]

I feel ya honey. It can be hard to remember those who you have lost. I know the pain.

[Canicus]

This is sad. I like the middles stanza, you did a very good job on this. keep it up.

[Leon R]

So sad but so beautiful. It has nice rhythm and very easy to read.

[joshua deathdealer]

This is sad but well written. Beautiful work Des...xx

[Robert Haigh]

A plaintive cry in the dark. Heartfelt and sad...thanks for sharing.

[Barbie]

It's pretty upsetting... But it's good... It doesn't quite have a rhythm though... Watch the syllables and stuff... Just suggesting...

[Draven]

Yeah, this is kinda sad. But you did a great job.

[rwar ish me]

this is sad,
I can relate to this very well.
It is a very nice write
And is well written.
~Amai

[C.A.Jordon]

I can relate. i really like the "I feel so cold as if I were inside the ice" line well done.