Bitter Day

All I can say....today is a bitter day....

The sun shines so bright

And it blast the morning with light

Dark clouds hide my heart

And the sadness tears me apart

 

I started my day with a frown

And the whole day I feel so down

My smiles are broken

And the anger is not hidden

 

Mind is blank, can’t focus at all

Hands are shaking, in my head there’s a howl

They criticize me, being mistreated

With their words, they fill me with hatred

 

If things goes with a bad result

They put the blame on me, always my fault

I can’t fight or talk back

All I can do is hit the wall until they crack

 

I was left in darkness

With this heart filled by bitterness

Oh, what a bitter day

I wish I could make it a better day

 

 

9:27 a.m.

October, 18, 2011

Author's Note

I wrote this poem just to let go all the pressure and loneliness I feel. sorry for the grammar problems.....honest opinions.... ^^,

Reviews

[Cicera]

Poetry is a little more than an open explosion that louder it sounds the wider its effect ranges. Moreover, those who would guess that the subtler it is expressed the closer it gets to be heard are not few. I am one person who thinks it is a pure matter of form, but so is the world and so you go and call it world. Writing is in a way a window of which we look out and say to the world what we want to say. Between the words there are forms, and formality always dresses these lines with the aspects of universal forms. In other words, writing in general is never the sole product of the writer, and so is art for the artist. To speak out of this frame and in this sense I should say about your poem that it is good in the sense that it is openly worded and straightforward. And I am one person who thinks that there is more to the movement of some olive leaves on a branch than just a passing gust. In that sense, writing should provide a deeper insight than one should normally expect.

[Solaris LeRouche]

I think its great! You write with good form, the grammer mistakes help add to the emotion and overall sweep of the piece!
Keep Writing, Sola

[Sakib]

It's really frustrating to have this kind of feeling. I can relate to this. Nice write. Full of emotions. :)

[Thea]

Freaking bitter day, rrrr, BV much...I shall return, I shall study harder, I shall attain my place again... T.T
Anti-jealousy pills, please? Hahaha! I need one again! XD
Great poem! Full of emotions! :)))
Wall E...!!!