Bitter Day

Bitter Day

A Poem by Desmund Tiny
"

All I can say....today is a bitter day....

"

The sun shines so bright

And it blast the morning with light

Dark clouds hide my heart

And the sadness tears me apart

 

I started my day with a frown

And the whole day I feel so down

My smiles are broken

And the anger is not hidden

 

Mind is blank, cant focus at all

Hands are shaking, in my head theres a howl

They criticize me, being mistreated

With their words, they fill me with hatred

 

If things goes with a bad result

They put the blame on me, always my fault

I cant fight or talk back

All I can do is hit the wall until they crack

 

I was left in darkness

With this heart filled by bitterness

Oh, what a bitter day

I wish I could make it a better day

 

 

9:27 a.m.

October, 18, 2011

© 2011 Desmund Tiny


Author's Note

Desmund Tiny
I wrote this poem just to let go all the pressure and loneliness I feel. sorry for the grammar problems.....honest opinions.... ^^,

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Poetry is a little more than an open explosion that louder it sounds the wider its effect ranges. Moreover, those who would guess that the subtler it is expressed the closer it gets to be heard are not few. I am one person who thinks it is a pure matter of form, but so is the world and so you go and call it world. Writing is in a way a window of which we look out and say to the world what we want to say. Between the words there are forms, and formality always dresses these lines with the aspects of universal forms. In other words, writing in general is never the sole product of the writer, and so is art for the artist. To speak out of this frame and in this sense I should say about your poem that it is good in the sense that it is openly worded and straightforward. And I am one person who thinks that there is more to the movement of some olive leaves on a branch than just a passing gust. In that sense, writing should provide a deeper insight than one should normally expect.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Sometimes, I also experience what you feel in this writing...

Good poem, indeed. You conveyed your emotions very well! Great job! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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well written.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Poetry is a little more than an open explosion that louder it sounds the wider its effect ranges. Moreover, those who would guess that the subtler it is expressed the closer it gets to be heard are not few. I am one person who thinks it is a pure matter of form, but so is the world and so you go and call it world. Writing is in a way a window of which we look out and say to the world what we want to say. Between the words there are forms, and formality always dresses these lines with the aspects of universal forms. In other words, writing in general is never the sole product of the writer, and so is art for the artist. To speak out of this frame and in this sense I should say about your poem that it is good in the sense that it is openly worded and straightforward. And I am one person who thinks that there is more to the movement of some olive leaves on a branch than just a passing gust. In that sense, writing should provide a deeper insight than one should normally expect.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a honest feeling,
could use some work hre and thee
but i know the feeling

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow this is such a strong and moving write I have been there before you are never alone, and the only way to see past all the crap is to try to rise above it, to life your head high. And trust God will help you through, I hope things get better. Thanks for the review by the way :-)

Posted 13 Years Ago


I feel this way so many times... I'm an emotional roller coaster at times!
Great write.
I felt your anger and desperation.

Posted 13 Years Ago


It does feel like that when you are having a bitter day, huh? The feel that everything around you is going downhill and the only way you can express yourself is by letting the anger out not on someone but within self. Sometimes its up to us to change that.

"I was left in darkness
With this heart filled by bitterness
Oh, what a bitter day
I wish I could make it a better day"

We all wish for that but it will come in its slow pace.



Posted 13 Years Ago


this is very nice,
A very good write
Good emotions swirl in this.
~Amai

Posted 13 Years Ago


I wish I could tell you about the bitter day I had. ^^* Anyway this was exquisite. I think we all have one of those days that just doesn't seem quite right and were everything that can go wrong does go wrong. Plus I know how you feel when you state people blame you for everything. >.> Great poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very nice poem and yeah the emotions are very relatable and universal to the human kind....really like the terrific flow also :)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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I just want the name "Desmund Tiny" because it is one of my favorite character in the Novel "Darren Shan" but you can call me Des. ^^, errr.. Hello to my old writings!~ wew it's been years I gues.. more..

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