Bitter Day

All I can say....today is a bitter day....

The sun shines so bright

And it blast the morning with light

Dark clouds hide my heart

And the sadness tears me apart

 

I started my day with a frown

And the whole day I feel so down

My smiles are broken

And the anger is not hidden

 

Mind is blank, can’t focus at all

Hands are shaking, in my head there’s a howl

They criticize me, being mistreated

With their words, they fill me with hatred

 

If things goes with a bad result

They put the blame on me, always my fault

I can’t fight or talk back

All I can do is hit the wall until they crack

 

I was left in darkness

With this heart filled by bitterness

Oh, what a bitter day

I wish I could make it a better day

 

 

9:27 a.m.

October, 18, 2011

Author's Note

I wrote this poem just to let go all the pressure and loneliness I feel. sorry for the grammar problems.....honest opinions.... ^^,

Reviews

[Cicera]

Poetry is a little more than an open explosion that louder it sounds the wider its effect ranges. Moreover, those who would guess that the subtler it is expressed the closer it gets to be heard are not few. I am one person who thinks it is a pure matter of form, but so is the world and so you go and call it world. Writing is in a way a window of which we look out and say to the world what we want to say. Between the words there are forms, and formality always dresses these lines with the aspects of universal forms. In other words, writing in general is never the sole product of the writer, and so is art for the artist. To speak out of this frame and in this sense I should say about your poem that it is good in the sense that it is openly worded and straightforward. And I am one person who thinks that there is more to the movement of some olive leaves on a branch than just a passing gust. In that sense, writing should provide a deeper insight than one should normally expect.

[Jed Sabffle]

Sometimes, I also experience what you feel in this writing...

Good poem, indeed. You conveyed your emotions very well! Great job! :)

[Me]

well written.

[Black]

a honest feeling,
could use some work hre and thee
but i know the feeling

[sarah]

Wow this is such a strong and moving write I have been there before you are never alone, and the only way to see past all the crap is to try to rise above it, to life your head high. And trust God will help you through, I hope things get better. Thanks for the review by the way :-)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I feel this way so many times... I'm an emotional roller coaster at times!
Great write.
I felt your anger and desperation.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

It does feel like that when you are having a bitter day, huh? The feel that everything around you is going downhill and the only way you can express yourself is by letting the anger out not on someone but within self. Sometimes its up to us to change that.

"I was left in darkness
With this heart filled by bitterness
Oh, what a bitter day
I wish I could make it a better day"

We all wish for that but it will come in its slow pace.

[rwar ish me]

this is very nice,
A very good write
Good emotions swirl in this.
~Amai

[Raven Starhawk]

I wish I could tell you about the bitter day I had. ^^* Anyway this was exquisite. I think we all have one of those days that just doesn't seem quite right and were everything that can go wrong does go wrong. Plus I know how you feel when you state people blame you for everything. >.> Great poem.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Very nice poem and yeah the emotions are very relatable and universal to the human kind....really like the terrific flow also :)