Prom Frustration

My first JS, I expected too much...... And I was disappointed but that was one of my greatest night I had with my friends.

You walk towards me but what a surprise

You ask her to dance instead of me

As you held her hand, tears well up in my eyes

I'd never thought that you would break your promise to me

 

The pain filled me as the two of you danced, I envy her

In her arms, the man I expected to be my last dance

The music becomes so sweet as you hold her closer

The jealousy stab my heart as I lost my chance

                                   

 

Unlike me, my companions are so lucky that night
as they danced with the one they love, they’re like princesses
he left me all alone in the dance floor, my Knight
With this gown I tried to be a beauty but still it's all useless

 

 

He broke his promise, he didn’t take my hands.

Black tears roll down to my face as the night ends  

Author's Note

Please ignore the grammar problems.....
I wrote this because I want to express my feelings for him........

Reviews

[Canicus]

This is a wonderful write. Alot of love and pain from this. I felt more emotiong from the second stanza. Just the way you wrote it

The pain filled me as the two of you danced, I envy her
In her arms, the man I expected to be my last dance
The music becomes so sweet as you hold her closer
The jealousy stab my heart as I lost my chance


Its like I can actually feel the pain from this part. You did an awesome job, keep it up.

[heart of an angel]

i love how you expressed it , and how that night was supposed to be magical by comparison princess and knight , but i loved it , even though it a sad story

[K.C. Zbryk]

the pain in this poem resonates through the reader, and the compairsons to princess and knight make this feel like a bent fairy tale. its never feels good to be lied to or rejected but in the end it means that you were meant for something better than the one you persued. Brilliantly written

[Sakib]

It really hurts when you get into situation like this. You expressed it nicely. Nice one!

[stars are far]

this is so sad :(
but you expressed it well and just take it as an advice men always hurt ...

[- - -]

D: that's awful...I'm sorry x'c

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Heartache really conveyed awesomely here...I can feel the emotions and wow!!! A real hearbreaking situation...

[Thea]

Whew, whew, whew, I smell some burner here... XD
Peace...