Prom Frustration

My first JS, I expected too much...... And I was disappointed but that was one of my greatest night I had with my friends.

You walk towards me but what a surprise

You ask her to dance instead of me

As you held her hand, tears well up in my eyes

I'd never thought that you would break your promise to me

 

The pain filled me as the two of you danced, I envy her

In her arms, the man I expected to be my last dance

The music becomes so sweet as you hold her closer

The jealousy stab my heart as I lost my chance

                                   

 

Unlike me, my companions are so lucky that night
as they danced with the one they love, they’re like princesses
he left me all alone in the dance floor, my Knight
With this gown I tried to be a beauty but still it's all useless

 

 

He broke his promise, he didn’t take my hands.

Black tears roll down to my face as the night ends  

Author's Note

Please ignore the grammar problems.....
I wrote this because I want to express my feelings for him........

Reviews

[Canicus]

This is a wonderful write. Alot of love and pain from this. I felt more emotiong from the second stanza. Just the way you wrote it

The pain filled me as the two of you danced, I envy her
In her arms, the man I expected to be my last dance
The music becomes so sweet as you hold her closer
The jealousy stab my heart as I lost my chance


Its like I can actually feel the pain from this part. You did an awesome job, keep it up.

[BeyondMySelf]

sad reality:) beautifully expressed

[nishalization]

Feeling of sympathy towards you.. Your message could clearly be seen.. Simply good work to realise

[Tasha]

These are well expressed feelings and very sad.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Nishant Gupta]

nice one, read mine too " QUEST OF LIFE".

[joshua deathdealer]

This is nice. Well penned and I like the ending..xx

[Larry Dyson]

venting is good ..and we won't judge it..but you have promise.. well expressed feelings

[Raven Starhawk]

As usual grammar is not a problem for me unless it is so ungodly obvious but your poem was a polished gem that made me sit in silence its beauty.

[M.Babu]

This is a saddening read...

Pain from a broken heart is sometimes relieved from a good write.

I hope this was such a release...

~M.Babu~

[Dark Beauty]

Great write with emotions of loss and betrayal expressed.Heartache always hurts and you penned it well!!