our FOREVER is now OVER

there are times that love fades away.........

Our love is like fireworks display

It fills the night with colours

But all of it slowly fades away

And all that’s left is like a dull silver armour

                                        

Our love is like beer

We are surely drunk together,

With happiness and cheers,

It all ends with a hangover

 

Our love is like a coaster ride

Every turn is crazy, like a joy ride

But now it makes me sick

I realized that we don’t click

 

From your warm arms, I want to break free

I don’t want to pretend my feelings aren’t fading

I don’t want to cause you hurt anymore

I’m sure that I won’t say forevermore

 

Conversations turning into screams

Now our love only bring us pain

It felt like a part of my dreams

And we’re torn apart in the middle of rain

 

We used to share love every night,

Now all we have are fights,

We promised to be together forever,

But now everything we have is over

Author's Note

this poem is requested by a dear friend of mine and edited by my bestfriend. please ignore the grammar problems..... ^^,

Reviews

[Dove]

AMAZING!! extremely well written. The rhyming was right on point. Awesome poem.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Excellent write!
The rhyming scheme was great!
And this was definitely well-worded.

[hmm]

so sad, but well written. Lovely set up.

[Symmie]

I love the analogies in the first three stanzas, they describe so perfectly how you are feeling. This is beautifully written, I love it!

[Chris Taylor]

I love the purity in your words in this piece. It is a very honest assessment of a relationship that has went the gamut of pleasure to pain. A joy to read.

[sarah]

This is sad but it is honest great work!

[Sakib]

It's really sad but so true. I liked the flow of the poem and the emotion it carries. Thanks for sharing.

[SinnerInspired]

Love the emotion& the creativeness

[FallenWingz]

that forever people like to promise i do not believe that love can ever be forever....

[Thea]

...
(speechless)