Unheard Confession

I saw him sitting on a bench at the train station

He was waiting for a ride

I can feel that he’s filled with tension

But I don’t know why.

 

He was sitting there all alone.

I called him but he didn’t hear me.

He was listening music in his earphones

His face looks pessimistically.

 

I sat beside him

And I think he didn’t notice it.

The space between us is thin

That makes my heart skip a beat

 

I’m so nervous and suddenly, I blurted it out.

“Why is the person you fall for was never me?”

He didn’t react, He seems to space out.

I’m disappointed but at the same time, I'm happy that he didn’t hear anything.

 

It makes my heart goes faster with each beat and it won’t stop racing

Then the train came and he rode it.

I confessed to him my feelings.

I’m glad that he didn’t hear anything of it.

Author's Note

Just ignore the grammar problems... >.<

Reviews

[stars are far]

This is so great i loved it a lot , i love that dark mood :)
well done :)

[New New]

I agree with what SoulCrusader said. I was able to picture this whole scene in my head. This was very well put together and I enjoyed reading it very much!

[Subham Chatterjee]

loved it :)

[Carina]

unrequited indeed... :)

[NightShade]

Excellent portrayal of unrequited feelings for another! There is anxiety, ecstasy and anguish ever present in such situations but sometimes, just sometimes, it's better that they never know... Well done!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Great poem, flow is awesome and love the imagery I can see the whole scene :)

[Black]

nice rhyming structure :)
keep working on it though :)

[Jeremy Baker]

Very well structured!

[Thea]

Gladly...Hahaha! Nice one... :)