Break Up

To you, it seems not right

When you couldn’t see me as often as you like

I’m fighting this sadness with all my might

So I can hold you in my arms tonight

 

You’ve been waiting through the evening

And suddenly, “I give up” you say

Because of this I’ve been crying

All night, all day

 

I tried to be strong inside

As the destiny tries to break us

You let go of my hand

That causes these tears to flow in my eyes

 

Everything we had is what I missed

I guess, we’re not meant together

The two of us, ending up like this

I thought we’d last forever.

Author's Note

I dedicate this poem to my two important friends who just broke up.
Just ignore the grammar problems.

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Nice work... (I like the green color used to highlight) The heartbreak is felt in the way you have written the thoughts of the narrator...Nicely done!

[Boldpen]

Very lovely write.
The beauty is inescapable.
Very touching and heartfelt.
Beautifully penned.

[K.C. Zbryk]

Sometimes the things that we expect to last fall apart too quickly for us to realize what is happening. you capture the pain this causes extremely well and the entire piece holds the readers attention until the end. Wonderful write and i hope that things get better

[Canicus]

wow, this was really good. Nice imagery, it was like it was right infront of me. Also you can tell there is alot of emotion put behind these word. You did well :)

[sushi]

Gives the images in front of my eyes.. Great work....

[joshua deathdealer]

You let go of my hand..so sad. Well written as always..xx

[....]

This is wonderful, I really enjoyed this write.

[stars are far]

This is so great .

[New New]

This is indeed a lovely dedication to friends, I was able to feel their pain as I read this and relate to it from past break ups. You have a way with words for sure!

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Nice friendly poem