Just a FRIEND?

Just a FRIEND?

A Poem by Desmund Tiny
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He said he loved me but he told them that we're just FRIENDS....

"

You call me a friend when you talk to others

It hurts because you pretend that we’re not lovers

Why do you hide it to them?

Does this relationship make you feel condemned?

 

You always show to me your love

and now you’re cutting me off

Is it real that we are a couple?

or it is just a lie, a big trouble?

 

You said I’m your beloved girl

but it seems your words are in swirl

You said you love me more than friends

and I know our relationship already ends

 

 

 

© 2012 Desmund Tiny


Author's Note

Desmund Tiny
it might not be that good but I hope you like it

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it's good....it's real& brings me back memories


Posted 11 Years Ago


Oh no not good, it's great. Why? Because you've poured out your heart writing it. Some people might hurt you but when the time comes, they'll be memories to give you lessons and ways not to be hurt the same way again. Thanks for sharing this one. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sometime we must know the truth and release the person. Better to be sad then to waste time on someone who don't care. Real love is always kind. I like the honest ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


friends, more than friends.....can be so complicated, I suppose wait till his further actions, will tell you more hopefully, great read :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Your realization might save you from other betrayals in the future.
Is it not better to be careful about retaining the relationship?
Would you read my Fakes to visualize lies in the name of love?

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Pax
its really good, true in every relationship.
one thing though the third line seems a bit off, maybe just opt out the it.
otherwise nice write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Desmund Tiny

12 Years Ago

thank you for correcting me...... ^-^
Pax

12 Years Ago

no probs..much better now
Heartache is hard to go through, especially when you do not have closure. You have expressed sad emotions and a feeling of betrayal, which is understandable. Nice work.



Just a suggestion: In the last sentence of the first stanza, should be "make", instead of makes. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Desmund Tiny

12 Years Ago

ok thanks.... ^.^
Robbie~xoxo~

12 Years Ago

I enjoyed reading it. :)
Guys do stupid things. I'd say he's afraid to let his friends know he's in love with someone, because they might start teasing him for that.
I liked the poem, it's sad and emotionally powerful.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Desmund Tiny

12 Years Ago

but he said it to a girl and somewhat she's flirty.... T^T

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I just want the name "Desmund Tiny" because it is one of my favorite character in the Novel "Darren Shan" but you can call me Des. ^^, errr.. Hello to my old writings!~ wew it's been years I gues.. more..

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