Hey Sam

You never know what you're fighting for

Hey Sam,

 

You have the darkest eyes

 

I've ever seen

 

From the look of your face

 

you haven't slept

 

in weeks

 

And I think that it's been

 

a while

 

Since I have really seen

 

you smile

 

And if you do

 

It's just a glimpse

 

Replaced, and solemn

 

Once again,

 

So, I won't stare

 

at your rosy lips

 

Turned down and pressed tight

 

So that you won't say the things

 

that always keep you up at night

 

 

Hey Sam,

 

Did you take a trip?

 

Over back roads, around winding bends

 

Was it late at night?

 

The radio low, as you spoke,

 

the road

 

Illuminated, by your dim headlights

 

Was it a long drive?

 

To a broken house

 

The garage all crowded with

 

Metal and Glass

 

A cauldron brewing with

 

your last chance

 

(preparing for a big breath)

 

Hold it in, tight, right

 

Let it go, as your eyes expand

 

Was it a bad batch?

 

 

Hey Sam,

 

Your eyes are redder than

 

I've ever seen

 

All swelled up around

 

bursted seams

 

Guess nothing is ever

 

the way it seems

 

I think I told you not to

 

waste your time

 

Investing your strength

 

in my careless mind

 

Yeah you never wrote

 

a thing about me

 

Just broken notes and

 

arpeggio sweeps

 

As I watched your fingers

 

bend and fly

 

Your brain a

 

Wicked lullaby

 

 

Hey Sam,

 

Don't do that again,

 

Don't mingle words with

 

thoughtless friends

 

You said, you're going to

 

change the way

 

You scream whenever

 

you awake

 

Has the Sun become your friend?

 

Have you found

 

a new companion?

 

Hey Sam...

 

Author's Note

First post in a long while....hope it measures up.

~enjoy

Reviews

[YouoweYoupay]

Beautiful personification of music, wondering and wandering . The poem flows in a way that makes you want to read further. I don't know who Sam is but this journey reminds me of someone.. I love your delicate yet natural use of words. And the ending is endless, like all the sunsets that repeat at the death of each day. Lovely creation. I will be reading you.

-youoweyoupay

[Moonflower]

Thank you for the thoughtfu review. I appreciate it very much, dear. Just glad that you could enjoy and possibly relate to my work and this story. Thanks, again. Hope to hear from you again.

[Hippy]

i like it. it is casual and strong
i enjoy the repetition of "hey sam" makes it personal, to sam or you, i couldn't say
i also enjoy the emotions, not saying love, but, put obviously toward him but he seems oblivious, due to a depression or drugs i don't know
also i like how you brought him alive with description, arpeggio sweeps, so musical, red eyes, drug reference, lips turned down, the way you describe him is unique not straight to it but with clues to be determined
great job

[M.D Leon]

the use of short phrases again builds a great flow, however it seems to hinder the experience in the very beginning, that is only of course a small nitpick. other than that the emotions expressed here are very good. great work. dont forget to check out my work!

[Rikkevi Rue]

how can such nonchalance evoke such deep emotions?! You possess that unique ability to make the simplest statement mean SO much more "than it says." There is a sad note that plays under the slightly hostile "face" of this poem so there are at least 3 lines running concurrently here: 1. The actual story itself 2. The emotional play 3. The intellectual message.

Really a pleasure and I agree with Robin it conjures up a song...!

[Robin]

So much of your poetry has a lyrical quality that would so easily turn into song , and this one I find my self singing along . You paint such strong images with your word choice and blend the emotions of darkness and light with your unique touch .

[paradise]

i really enjoyed it great job

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting poem. I like the flow and the questions in the poem. I like the way you set-up the poem. Allowing the reader to fall into the story and question. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote