From the Ashes

of your guitar..

 

 

 

 

Her body burned,

 

in fiery vengeance

 

with curling smoke

 

that  billowed

 

out around charred edges

 

There was a sinister air,

 

caked with fumes

 

Fueled by the black oil that

 

escaped her lips,

 

 pillowed by ash

 

If I destroyed you

 

in various, subtle ways

 

Could you forgive me, with

 

a flinch  and a whisper

 

that carried hints of goodbye

 

Light fell,

a curious dawn approaching

 

In a folded backdrop

 

 with nervous eyes

 

I felt the ground shake, but maybe that

 

was just my hands

 

Reaching for that aching look

 

that shadowed your tear adorned features

 

When you sucked in your breath

 

Did you hear the wind blow

 

through climbing branches

 

I remember when you told me

 

about the stars, the ancient little secrets

 

Each one held

 

And then you took my hands

 

and kissed each finger

 

cradled in your spider hands..

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. Started strong and got better with each line.
"Could you forgive me, with
a flinch and a whisper
that carried hints of goodbye"
The use of strong statements made the poem come alive. I like the way you ended the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Hippy]

burning what was and recalling a memory?? I think i was lost or distracted

[M.D Leon]

sensual imagery, very enjoyable piece to say the least.

[Mockingbird]

great imagery and beautiful language. it is very descriptive and it draws you in. nice piece.

[Elwina]

I loved it so much. So powerful, I was captivated from the start til the end. Anger and hurt so intricated, I could feel this very vividly. The flow was great too. Nice job.

[Rouillie Wilkerson]

Sensual..write on!

95 leaves room for improvement. ;-)

[Periac]

brilliant.....wonderful lustful feeling

[paradise]

Ph wow this is a fantastic poem I love how it flows

[SilentDreamer]

Oh, what a great poem! The imagery was well done, and to a point. I love the last stanza's last line. I think the last line is important and sets the whole poem, and yours ended well.

[A-Lovely-Anxiety]

I always enjoy reading your work.
It's always so beautiful; so elegant.
Keep writing.

[Bard Constantine]

I liked this. A creepy undertone to the emotional damage inflicted. The true fact is that we hurt those we care for most at times, and vice versa. Torn, jagged feelings expressed in dark, vivid poetics. Love it...