The binding

I can’t remember what I meant to say

Yesterday was the same as today

But when I think,

Oh the words that you said

I want to push it all

Out of my head

 

So I look out my window and see

A bit of broken glass, A birds nest in a tree

 

And If I climbed to the top of

The world

would you watch as I jumped,

As I soared

 

With my  arms open wide,

With my eyes on the ground

Oh I would fall so softly,

Oh Without a sound 

 

The branches sway, rustle in the breeze

A gentle wave, as they  whisper to me

And if lonliness was a  song

it would cry

A wail of pain

 tear choked stars in the sky

 

Oh if her sorrow could look you

In the eyes

Would you clearly see that Love

Still resides

 

Reach inside your evil heart and find

A bed of thorns;her blood soaked thighs

 

OH beneath the crescent

Moon she lies

In a circle of doom, under

Wretched skies

 

I can’t remember what I meant to say

Yesterday was the same as today

But when I think,

Oh the words that you said

I want to push it all

Out of my head

Author's Note

...a song?

Reviews

[Tony]

Like your use of metaphorical language and the cyclic feeling you create-- it gives this one a real dreamlike quality. Like someone caught in a whirl pool of emotions and thoughts. Feelings can do that to a person-- very penentrating write.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

YES a song that would be marvolous to music! Very well written

[Sam Severn]

Beautiful n' powerful! ㋡

[Adam :P]

yes. good.

[Cynthia]

Yes, a song!

[Robin]

yes !

[Ed Hart]

a dirge

[benzohol]

This is my favorite of your work.

I must say, I have a real heckuva time deciphering your poetry.

What starts with an apologetic tone quickly shifts to a more apathetic one by the fifth stanza. From there it seems to transcend to anger, possibly even malice.

Despite how cryptic and vague are your choice of words, your cerebration appears ostensibly enough.

"And if lonliness was a song

it would cry

A wail of pain tear choked stars in the sky"

No one puts thought to words like you do.

[Clockwork]

I really like your images in this piece. You weave a complete storyline through the whole piece. I also like your theme of ups and downs. The images you combine combine with that theme create a physical and emotional mirror for the theme in the piece.

I think that this very well could be a song because it has the flow and the rhythm to get it there. It would be nice to hear it sung.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I saw the death of innocence. It was almost like some sort of sacrificial lamb.

I was most impressed by the duality of the beauty in contrast to the edifice of darkness that existed in this poem. I love how you made them exist in a
natural harmony. The line between the two is very blurry but smooth in gradient tones of emotion.

I really liked the unusual breaks in the speech. It added some impact into the thoughts. It made it feel natural...as if the words were being found as they were being expressed.