Look Away

Honesty

 

 

I tried to drown myself

in whiskey

But all I had to drink

was rum

And it just increased

the heartache

It didn't even make

me numb

 

And now your silver smile

  is reflected in the water

As I bathe away our sins,

As I bury the pain farther

 

 

Farther away

 

I just wish that I didnt have to stay

When the clouds are smothering the stars

and my knees are bitter from falling

Yeah I've ripped open all the scars

But I'm not bleeding, I'm just not breathing

 

The sound of your heart, stuttering against

Life...Death...

You must be apathetic to my woes

So that you don't dig the knife deeper

and find a vein

For your "friend" was something cheaper

Than all of our mistakes

Reviews

[Kiari Sabon]

its sad but good

[Norma M Sutton]

Interesting.

[Rikkevi Rue]

oooh i like this write...because it gets right down into the syrupy emotions of "love" and wallows! and it speaks from the heart and it wields those hard feelings with a cutting vengeance...bravo!...you were just writing right? ;~) few have the piercing "stark reality" factor down like you without sounding whiney!

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"The sound of your heart, stuttering against
Life...Death...
You must be apathetic to my woes
So that you don't dig the knife deeper"
~~this is ingenious-i love this poem~~~

:)

[Nobody.]

powerful indeed. really felt it.

[KAREN]

A powerful write! AND a enjoyable read!!