Simply this time, please

 

 

We won't talk about the weather

  Yeah I know that winter

  gets you down

And I'll just try to smile cause

  You don't ever want to see me frown

 

You said that you love me and swear

  to tell the truth

   I know that we all lie

just to cover up the roots

 

  (animalistic behavior)

 

They only get us farther down the line

   Yeah I'll watch your face as all the pain and

guilt resides

   If only you could see the way that

   these tears fell from my eyes

A river of reflections, sinking and drowning

   "Why"'s

 

OH what were you looking for

when you walked out your door

(and turned off your phone)

 

Did her smiling eyes reflect her golden winters glow?

Did her laughter brush lightly across your fingertips,

frowning when you had to go?

 

I'll never forgive these stony skies,

these bleak and whispering good byes

Because I know that

you never loved

 

the winter.

 

 

Reviews

[Dinesh Sairam]

"You said that you love me and swear
to tell the truth
I know that we all lie
just to cover up the roots"

"I'll never forgive these stony skies,
these bleak and whispering good byes
Because I know that
you never loved"

These two stanzas appealed to me very much. Pardon me, I'm partial towards poems that are set in rhythm. And also, if you choose to write a rather lyrical poem, try not to be too poetic. That's why there's a differentiation between 'poetry' and 'lyrics'. Of course, both are good in their own way.

Keep writing.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

gripping with its emotional content~ good writing! with excellent expressives~

[Undying Glory]

wow this was an amazing poem. you've captured all the feelings of betrayal and a broken heart here and made it into a brilliant piece of writing here. awesome

[Cynthia]

Great Poem!

[Robin]

your pen is fluent in 'heart' ~

[Nobody.]

on the sentiment...I agree completely with Mr. Hart. Onthe writing.....brilliantly done.
cheers!

[KAREN]

Nice job! Trying to be something for the person you love, smiling even when you don't feel like! great emotions bought out.

[Ed Hart]

if he doesn't want to see you frown, he doesn't want to see you, not really