By careful examination...

 

 

I had a dream

everyone died

and I found myself alone

scared, wondering why

death hadn't claimed me as his own

 

So I screamed into their ears

their bodies still, upon the bed

ripping at the sheets, screaming

 

"Everyone is dead!"

 

As if the world was sleeping,

all their eyes closed to the light

I walked about in daytime as if

 lost, and beheld the sights

 

And all the cars were parked and silent

all the doors were locked up tight

As if everyone was sleeping, as if day

had become night

 

And I cried, all shrill and painful

A wail that shook the wind and birds

they all flew away swiftly, the sound

so ghastly and disturbed,

 

My tears were like cold ribbons

streaming from my rosy eyes

 and I just kept wondering if there was

anyone to hear me cry

 

Did the whole world lay sleeping, uncaring

of their demise?

 

So I ran up to the houses, looking

through windows and doors

And I weeped and banged and pleaded

until I couldn't any more

 

Who had cast this wicked curse,

was I alone forever more?

 

I ran back to my home, grabbed the

keys and ran

starting up the car with nervous

shaking hands

The car shrieked with resistance

as I stepped on the gas

wailing with the metal

as the silent houses passed

 

The streetlights gleamed with color

telling me to stop and wait

but I barreled through the red and

did't stop to anticipate

because no other cars were coming

their owners would not awake

 

Author's Note

I'm not even sure where this is going, but I feel as if it isn't finished...a story of sorts, who knows?

Reviews

[Jonathan De Elvira]

How do you do it? I mean you managed to captured my mood and put me in this dark, cold, silence, gloomy and empty space while reading this, you're good....Cleverly written and amazingly done.

[tynamite]

This is amazing. It's one of the best things on here that I've read. I love the poetic storytelling and how interesting it is to read.

[Bard Constantine]

Interestingly, just this morning I checked out a movie preview almost exactly like this, where a guy wakes up to find that almost everyone in the city had vanished... like your poem, it's an eerie thought. Nice writing, perhaps you should flesh it out to a story...

[Coyote Poetry]

It would be a scary life to lose family and friends. I like the feel and the emotion of this poem. Being alone would have few advantages and much sadness. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Rikkevi Rue]

ah but now you have stepped over the threshold into the realm of "mind..." which is a serious advance whether you realize it or not! Think of Poe's work like "The Raven" which seesaws back and forth totally on the strange bridge linking reality and that which appears to be real, leaving the reader to fret over it! Brilliant write and you have moved another step up. The best part of it is that you have an ENDLESS number of these creations inside of that clever mind of yours!!!

[sarah]

Creepy! but very interesting It kept my attention very well. Great work!

[Norma M Sutton]

I like it. As much as I crave solitude that would be way TOO much of it.

[.quan.011.]

This is a very creppy peom, but I like it.

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

it might feel unfinished.. but that is what i love most.. it isn't a complete moment.. it is a moment that is still happening and happening and happening, long after our eyes have moved past the final word.. it makes it feel alive and THAT gives the most deliciously unsettled feeling.. like in a shirley jackson story...

[Hello, Goodbye]

This is absolutely brilliant. I loved every word of it.. The streaming feelings and the precise melodic narrative proved to be quite splendid.. Your fluidity in the storytelling makes me envious and while I was left with a feeling of want, it certainly did satisfy..