By careful examination...

 

 

I had a dream

everyone died

and I found myself alone

scared, wondering why

death hadn't claimed me as his own

 

So I screamed into their ears

their bodies still, upon the bed

ripping at the sheets, screaming

 

"Everyone is dead!"

 

As if the world was sleeping,

all their eyes closed to the light

I walked about in daytime as if

 lost, and beheld the sights

 

And all the cars were parked and silent

all the doors were locked up tight

As if everyone was sleeping, as if day

had become night

 

And I cried, all shrill and painful

A wail that shook the wind and birds

they all flew away swiftly, the sound

so ghastly and disturbed,

 

My tears were like cold ribbons

streaming from my rosy eyes

 and I just kept wondering if there was

anyone to hear me cry

 

Did the whole world lay sleeping, uncaring

of their demise?

 

So I ran up to the houses, looking

through windows and doors

And I weeped and banged and pleaded

until I couldn't any more

 

Who had cast this wicked curse,

was I alone forever more?

 

I ran back to my home, grabbed the

keys and ran

starting up the car with nervous

shaking hands

The car shrieked with resistance

as I stepped on the gas

wailing with the metal

as the silent houses passed

 

The streetlights gleamed with color

telling me to stop and wait

but I barreled through the red and

did't stop to anticipate

because no other cars were coming

their owners would not awake

 

Author's Note

I'm not even sure where this is going, but I feel as if it isn't finished...a story of sorts, who knows?

Reviews

[Sasha]

Can't wait for the rest of the poem, I loved it so far. It's poetry all the way for me.

Great job. looking forward to the other part.

[Marie Harrison]

I think you should write a short story about this. It's very interesing. I loved your desciption of crying. Very nice poem.

[Sunflower 20]

i can understand where your coming from and yes, i think this could be a great story. this is just the beginning.

Buts thats what i love about writing; never knowing how its going to end! :)

[Ruth]

I think this would make an excellent story love!
The imagery is surreal and deep!
Anguish, a where to now feeling?!
Excellent!
xx

[Tony]

Wow, what a bizarre vision of isolation and anxiety-- very "I Legend" like with Will Smith. I think we have all felt this way before.

[Sweets]

This is so interesting, Grabbed my attention from the first few lines
Great job!
-Sweets

[OutsideSyntax]

This is deadly ;)

[Nothing Personal]

Yeah..I would like to know more..But a wild, wild dream if one had. The loneliness is creepy and really gripping..Great job. And the desperation is genuine. To find life. To have company.

[Brad]

this was fantastic!! this could very much be a story and the mystery of all their deaths could be the plot of the whole book.

[YouoweYoupay]

Awesome! You left at some sort of cliffhanger. TRULY HOPING THERS MORE! LOVED the whole thing.