I hate read requests. Unless someone personally asks me ahead of time, I feel as though it's a bit...rude. But it's ok because I like you :)
Anyways, this is quite lyrical, but starts to be so towards the end. I am a fan of your work and find it very interesting to read, it has a strong voice leading it, but I feel as though it needs a tad bit of editing. Keep working, you've got fantastic talent :)
I admire your work love because you speak from the heart! Truly so:) This is awesome:) You take your poetry to many levels and thats a sign of talent! Awesome!
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This is...apt on so many levels; relationships, just being in general... You've said very much and, as such, force to reflect upon our own delusions, even the ones we have finally admitted are delusions. Moonflower, for making me to think even more than I already do, thank you. Excellent, excellent work, Ms.
I really liked this, really! You had some great imagery here. My favorite?
-"was I the dirt under your nails?"
Some great language too. The one that spoke the most to me?
-"Some one told me that We
are all drenched in
Sin"
It was genius for you to include the word "sin" as its own line, it really gave emphasis to the word.
Overal great poem and thanks for recommending it to my reading list! ;D
Symptomatic... as in medical therapy that treats only the symptoms, not the cause... connect that thought to emotional distress and this piece all that more vivid. The thought of someone suffering without hope of being cured is a bleak one, as is the thought of being hurt emotionally while those who should care are swallowed by their own faults. This throbs with sadness, almost painful to read...
this style of writing i find particularly engrossing because it is not slave to structure, yet uses it as an accent in the final measure, it is not beholden to a romantic mode yet it is colored with romanticism throughout. It doesn't have a classical bent, yet it moves in distinct movements. Like a miniature symphony of words with its movements...maybe it is a hybrid style, a potpourri of poetic styles from the ages.
Whatever the case, it is moving and also is not shallow. One of the best features in my opinion is that depth and layers that one can contemplate after the first, second, third etc. read and find deeper meaning. Delicious write
The anguish is so thick in this piece, and you wordplay is absolutely scrumptious. I hate that I love eating your misery, but you make it so delectably delicious. Your raw emotional blood you use to fill your pen leaves a dried scent I cannot resist. Glad to have you back, Moonflower.
This poem was slow torture.
You went to an incredibly dark place.
You provoked a lot of thought about
the price of self preservation and
the things we look for in a mate to
complete ourselves. Brilliant!
Hello :)
My name is Desiree.
What brings me to this website is my love for poetry and storytelling. At this time I consider myself more of a poet, than a writer or author.
I do not have the pa.. more..