Extricating Actualism

I thought that maybe
I would be able to say

something tonight

while we brandish
thin, callousness

Remarking on
keen intuition and
biting stares

Hollow eyes could never know
the flavor of a whiskey
burnt smile

Slurred over by

aching, wistfulness

We weren't hungover
only frightened of what

might come next

Tomorrow might hold
a new dawn
That terrified
screeching
of a thousand
Highs
borrowed goodbyes

Who can ever know
how this path might
bend

I tried to
wish on rainbows

hoping that sunshine
might
illuminate the darkness

But when we stood around
a circle
full of fools and
incarceration

We prayed, hands folded
eyes peering out
into the bleak,
The unknown

I think we're all uncertain
plaster faces,
sun damaged skin and
clenched fists.We're falling

twisting our flesh with
rotten
dew drops
borne of the weakest, the
most incomprehensible

I'll take your slender
fingers
like racing unencumbered
thoughts
flying against the wind

Dance beneath the
sky tonight
with scattered stars
and a frowning moon

I'll take those mescaline
highs 

Fluttering mind f***s

If you smile

one
more

time.

Author's Note

..are you there?

Reviews

[Sweets]

I loved this :)
such a wonderful poem :)

[Miss Coral]

Wonderful write- I think that perhaps the beginning could be a bit stronger, and that punctuation would really improve the flow, but otherwise, this was wonderful. Great concept and even better language. Great job. c:

-Coral-

[Charles]

You use allegory as well as anyone I read, here on WC. This was an excellent read.

[Marie Harrison]

Wonderous poem. Lots of beautiful images in this free flowing poem.

[Nobody.]

Beautifully written. your words weave together to form a stunning piece of art. it dredged up many emotions that I have felt in similar situations. "fluttering mind f***s" is a brillliant word combo, btw. love it.

what I like the most about it is that it is intense and emotional, but there is a sense of humor to the words that keeps it so well grounded in the human experience. it spoke to me.
cheers!

[The Silver Chord]

Seems amazing to me.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

edges sharp and refined~ incredible vivid cadence down the page~

raw and unplugged

[Brad]

one of your rawest i've read so far...such base feelings put poetically into light...i get the feeling of a relationship based on something physical, and only emotional when one has embibed in the spirits...
killer line:
"I'll take those mescaline
highs
and fluttering
mind f***s
If you smile one
more time."

i'll drink to that

[Ruth]

i have to say love, this is raw! a great poem, nothing is crystal clear at any point it seems in life and its experiences! This poem really hits the spot, nothing is all stars and prettiness, not picture perfect all the time! But we still hope for that smile to reassure us! Great poem love xx