Extricating Actualism

I thought that maybe
I would be able to say

something tonight

while we brandish
thin, callousness

Remarking on
keen intuition and
biting stares

Hollow eyes could never know
the flavor of a whiskey
burnt smile

Slurred over by

aching, wistfulness

We weren't hungover
only frightened of what

might come next

Tomorrow might hold
a new dawn
That terrified
screeching
of a thousand
Highs
borrowed goodbyes

Who can ever know
how this path might
bend

I tried to
wish on rainbows

hoping that sunshine
might
illuminate the darkness

But when we stood around
a circle
full of fools and
incarceration

We prayed, hands folded
eyes peering out
into the bleak,
The unknown

I think we're all uncertain
plaster faces,
sun damaged skin and
clenched fists.We're falling

twisting our flesh with
rotten
dew drops
borne of the weakest, the
most incomprehensible

I'll take your slender
fingers
like racing unencumbered
thoughts
flying against the wind

Dance beneath the
sky tonight
with scattered stars
and a frowning moon

I'll take those mescaline
highs 

Fluttering mind f***s

If you smile

one
more

time.

Author's Note

..are you there?

Reviews

[Ramiz Ilham Khan]

Wow - This is not only brave but also a tempest of secretly placed thoughts that could not afford to lay back anymore. Good work.

[Bard Constantine]

This has such a dark intensity it's almost hard to read... it never ceases to amaze me that such savage songs beat in your chest; the voice of an ancient child who recognizes the true face of civilization. The future may look bleak indeed, but with that special someone it somehow becomes tolerable... sentiments of many who are lost but to each other...

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Wow...this truly is a wild field trip like Coyote Poetry said...so much intense imagery that bites at one ...so much bleakness in life yet it all becomes overturned at the single hint of a smile from a dear one..

[Jonathan De Elvira]

wow,
the last line shocked me as well...

[lookforthegreens]

its like a story, its great and it makes me want to look up the words i don't know so i can fully understand it

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Your beautiful and elegant words inspire awe. I loved the images you projected
into the mind. I felt that the asymmetrical stanzas made it all the more sincere
and from the heart. None of it felt prepared...although your thoughts were all
strategically placed.

[TAO]

I was afraid of what might come next the entire I was reading this. This has a subtle potency to it; it's not right there in your face, but it speaks to something subconscious and primal within us. Well done.

[Hippy]

i really like it i think the lines could be divided better but it doesnt matter its your art, it took a second to comprehend this piece for me but it sounds great and has so many great lines bravo

[.quan.011.]

Wow this is a awesome peom. It has great detail and flow.

[Adelia Alighieri]

I like the intensity in your expression. Keep writing.