Star Child

 

I could break down

the complexes

see

through the walls

of serpentine and

indecision

Fear is an obstacle of Illusions

That blade

had seeped into your

lucid brain

Thin slices,

left your face a

mirror

of what was there

before.

 

Reviews

[Miss Coral]

Great imagery and emotion- wonderfully balanced. The font change at the very end was done superbly, and made the last tone hit really hard. Great job! :)

[aloha.]

soooo much imagery. that's a way to my heart. haha. that was fantastic!

[Bard Constantine]

This was a surreal trip into the illusion of who we are... so vivid in the sharpness of the phrases. Nicely done...

Just my opinion: 'complexities' may work better than 'complexes'.

[DalainaRenee]

Nicley, done!

[Aven]

it's a wonderful poem, however, you could have polished up the presentation a bit. nice work :)

[Alicia Schroeder]

this is greatly written, nice, very nice

[KL]

Wow! Your poetry has a permanent flow to it that always carries my eyes from start to finish. The last three lines are nothing short of incredible, some fantastic imagery.

[A.A.Romanczuk]

delectable...not at all what I expected after reading the title...but all the better for it

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

surreal slices in haunting array~

[CLosed]

Wonderful, i am going through a bit of fear atm so i loved this.