Lessons

 

 

We sat close to the window

Letting our eyelashes burn

And I thought that maybe you'd know

all the lessons I had yet to learn

 

So when trudging down the sidewalk

beside that empty, broken street

We didn't laugh, We didn't talk

As the leaves swirled around our feet

 

Oh They say this world is turning

at such an uncertain degree

But when I'm lying on the pavement

it doesn't really matter to me

 

We tried to take the pieces

and sew them back together again

So if our love ever ceases

We'll have something to remember this

 

I wish that I could remove

all that grey behind your eyes

Life can't always be smooth

but I guess it doesn't hurt to try

 

Cause they say this world is turning

at an uncertain degree

but I think that it's okay, dear

It never really mattered to me

 

Yeah they say this world is turning

at a measurable speed

But when I see your face dear

Nothing ever matters to me

Author's Note

This is a song I'm working on...the lyrics may change, I'm not to happy with them, I think I could make it better. Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[A.A.Romanczuk]

As a poem, it's beautiful...as lyrics...well, I don't know too much about lyrics...but as a poem...please..leave it as is :) It's lovely...
I love these lines:
Oh They say this world is turning

at such an uncertain degree

But when I'm lieing on the pavement

it doesn't really matter to me


And the idea of memories reminding one of past love:)

[.]

well, I think it flows really well..there's a sadness throughout the piece and it touched me..well done

[Brad]

i actually had an acoustic running through my head F, C, G with an Am and Em bridge...i like how this flowed, and the story so relavent

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is good. For a song I feel the lines don't flow well. I'm very weak at rhythm myself. Writing music is very hard. the voice must be able to move with ease with the words. I like the story in the poem. Your words are always a field trip. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Norma M Sutton]

I think it's a good start. I would be interested in the melody for this.

[Kelley]

I like this a lot Moonflower !!! And I could picture the eye lashes burning in my mind....smiles. I think you have a great start to a song here. Kind of reminds me of a Type O Negative song.

Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Uniqe In Many Ways]

so good!

[Crinkle°]

so, so nice.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

beautifully written~ the melody is right there just waiting to happen~

[Omar Fendri]

full of emotions... honest emotions coming from your deep. I'm sure that no one will feel this poem's words as well you do, but it's still spoken and heartfelt :) very smooth to read and anyone would enjoy it.
well-done.
i love cherish these two sentences "So if our love ever ceases, we'll have something to remember" :)

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

This would be a very well- written song and poem as well. Piano solo would be good and a very soft- quiet song. Great job.