Atonement

 

 

 

Deconstruct

your resolution

beneath the lies

 

Institutions

 

I have no feel

for intuition

though I beg

that my heart listen

 to your eager,

biting scorn

 

You have left me, unadorned

 

Behind a wall of

lead and stone

I travel through

the deep

 

Atone

 

Me for things I have not said

I wished for you and so have bled

 

A thousand nights I've watched the moon

Full and red, a sculpted swoon

So as you wander into the sea

Filling your lungs

with kerosene

Take a step

into my heart

And then, my dear,

We shall not part

 

For on a bed of thorns we lie

emersed in things that

cannot die,

caressing words

to ease the burn, I'll whisper

as the pages turn

and fold into those paper wings

the ones so black with silver rings

 

 I'll dangle blindly underneath 

 serated edge,

your charcoal teeth

So when you

slice in thin remarks

your eyes a candle,

 flying sparks

I will sink, finally free

 

 Love and Darkness

...Let me be...

 

 

Author's Note

Finished. ;)

Reviews

[KL]

'so as you wander into the sea
Filling your lungs
with kerosene'

Crazy imagery right there... favourite lines in the poem. A complex bit of writing here, conveying the longing of one for another when there is so much between, namely illusions and misunderstandings. Nicely done.

[Matthews Reggie]

complex but beautiful.... had to read it twice... perfect imagery and idea expression.... well written....

[Ruth]

To sink, can be to be free, after all, darkness can hold light too though :)
This is, as always, beautifully written love:) Always a pleasure to read your work!
xx

[Omar Fendri]

Love and darkness let me be...
I wish i can choose a stanza to stay it's my favorite... I couldn't. The whole song's my favorite. Perfect... well-done
this is one of the best lyrics I've ever read:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Atonement. Something in life can't be atone for. I like this poem. The rawness and directness make the poem very powerful.
"For on a bed of thorns we lie
emersed in things that
cannot die, "
The ending was very true. In time we learn to accept things and move on.
A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Lilly]

Really great imagery and desription throughout this poem. I like the dark edge to this piece also. Great piece.

[M.Kilani]

A dark gothic love !! where pain combines hearts, a bound although hurts ... although out of sight a scar is enough to bring back memories ...
outstanding piece ... the images, emotions , and the flow were all perfect... well done .

[William]

"caressing words

to ease the burn, I'll whisper

as the pages turn"

I love this.
Definitely much improved. The last two stanzas and the last line suit the poem nicely. Very good job. :D

[William]

It feels a tad unfinished to me, maybe? The ending was somewhat abrupt. However, it's still a very solid write.