'so as you wander into the sea
Filling your lungs
with kerosene'
Crazy imagery right there... favourite lines in the poem. A complex bit of writing here, conveying the longing of one for another when there is so much between, namely illusions and misunderstandings. Nicely done.
More eloquence, a continuation of "Skeleton Girl," peeling away, peeling away.
"I'll dangle blindly underneath/serrated edge,/your charcoal teeth/So when you slice in thin remarks/your eyes a candle,/flying sparks/I will sink, finally free/Love and Darkness/...Let me be..."
The mystics say "die before you die," which isn't really the same thing as Eros and Thanatos getting it on in the Romantic sense, but you certainly make the thorns as interesting as the roses (there's a cheeky S/M title Forget the Roses, Send Me the Thorns).
the enchanting imagery...this is one of my favorites of Your work..."Love and Darkness
...Let me be..."
Great ending line....yes.there is nothing that can slice through one so deeply as love ...followed by darkness....lovely write
It's hard to describe the dark enchantment of this piece... I felt a smile spread as I read this... your flow and rhyme scheme is melodic, something I don't recollect you doing before, but I shouldn't be surprised that you do it so well. The lines sing sweetly of pain and love and darkness... so delectable a dish. Absolutely spellbinding, my dear...
like a song, can almost hear you speaking over a mic in some dark coffee house. the taste of this is bittersweet, but isn't everything in life like that?
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My name is Desiree.
What brings me to this website is my love for poetry and storytelling. At this time I consider myself more of a poet, than a writer or author.
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