In The Ville

It doesn't matter if I take
these pills
Live on cheap thrills
and throw my life away..
whats another day
in this hell hole I call,
my life.
Down another shot
and its stings going
down
but I don't make
a sound...

Roll another blunt
and hit the road
We're taking my hooptie
as its dragging its soles
Clamber away in
a cloud of smoke
We can find something
to do

even though we're broke.




Wake up
and its another day.
bright outside
but I'm still wasting away

So I snort another line
pop open that beer.
roll another blunt
and we'll be just fine
right here.

I'm rolling
on the ashes of my own
demise
I hate all of you but I just
tell my self lies.
Breaking down into
these viscious street
highs.
but I dont think I'll live
long enough to drown
my cries.

Reviews

[Michael X]

so raw and passionate and artfully sculpted sentences tht create a sense of
breathing in the linebreaks, and the meaning sings of a tragedy
and loss to utter the joys of sorrow, the way drinking drowns away
the tears, and neon lights cultivate the mind to lose itself in the notion,
you have such an amazing way with words, and the emotions are
felt to the inner core, passionate and soft poison.

[Brittany W]

So deep, but its so truthfull, it tells the life of how certain people live and you tell it very well, great job on this.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Artificial stimulants can be great escape from reality but eventually leave you feeling empty... I love the attitude of this piece cause I feel like it so often...
this part fascinated me...

I hate all of you but I just
tell my self lies.

sometimes we lie when we feel alone so people think that is how we want it.
A solid piece of writing.

[CherryBomb]

I like this!
Its goes well.

[Matthews Reggie]

really good work with an array of feelings... good job

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the bleak tumble down of spirit weeps down the page ~ you've captured the downward spiral with deeply affecting poetic movements~

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

Really like this. I catch the hopelessness that goes with addiction. Very good.

[M.Kilani]

full of hopelessness that is covered by intoxication !! great piece, goes well along with the cigarette I'm smoking.
well done

[skye]

i love writing i can relate to.
reading this,i couldnt help but reminisce these situations.
great read :D

[loowzerX]

Reminds me of Alice in Wonderland, when she falls through the hole and feels trapped kind of. I like it. Another great poem from a gre at poetess :P

[Jonathan De Elvira]

......good......