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Would you let death wrap its silver coils

around your breath, emptying your soul in

serpentine spools

Your life like festooned yarn, unraveling

before His putrid eyes...

 

Or would you surrender mine instead?

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

This comes across as a person faced with a dilemma of selling their soul to some kind of devil, or throwing the one close to them into the fire, so to speak.

The image of the "soul emptying in serpentine spools" is very dark, devious and sinful...I love it.

The brevity serves the poem well.

Well done.

[Aven]

No, I would not surrender yours instead!

[David W Moore III]

How much is your love? to give for me? that is the question we always ask. Excellently put. And expertly written.

[Michael X]

Wow, absolutely awsome work and style, it breathes passion, beautiful job
conceptualized plot, and form.

[Crow]

I have no words to express how much I liked this piece of art...

Thank you.

[Shante Payne]

Well when you put it that way...

This is very thought provoking and I agree with FlawedByDesign it seems as if the speaker is forcing someone to make a decison of burning themselves alive or burning her alive. It is dark and genius. Who would ask a loved one such a question? Yet it makes me want to go read it to my guy and see what his response would be.

[Bard Constantine]

Love the swell of darkness... your words make razor sharp the meaning... the choice of sacrifice or surrender... with an open ending that makes you think...

[Randolf Ramos]

martyrdom, is it a test of true intentions?
Love will find its way.

[SilentDreamer]

Dark, eerie, paints a picture. Great job

[Coyote Poetry]

Traded your life for another. That is the big question for most. I believe most of us would trade palaces for a child or a love one. A powerful poem. A very good question asks in the poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

True friends will push you out of the way of the bus not throw you under it... very raw and direct words that you should be asked.