Dying Flame

 

 

 

Maybe...I will die

 

And then these words will echo

 

Forever in your minds

 

I'm a shadow on the wall

 

A flickering flame

 

One day I will go out,

 

Never to return again

Reviews

[Akshat♥]

a different to see..
short and sweet...
i enjoy reading this work of yours..
nice write:)

[Poetry Girl]

this is good.

[M.Kilani]

yet a memory shall remain,
of love, rage, and pain,
and then thee shalt not regret,
for thy flame shalt illuminate,
for ye embrace thy fate.

once again your words urge me to write verses as a reply. outstanding work.

[Pax Analog]

The flickering fragility of mortal life should make us all truer, kinder (but not sappier), and more determined to discern the source of our mysterious awareness.

Each apparently separate life is all lives, and rather than either nihilism or religious hope, time is better spent unveiling what the mystics know.

Then a whole new vista of surprise may greet the refreshed inner eye.

[FlawedByDesign]

Brief but definitely not devoid of feeling. You do a great job at painting the picture in very few words and leave the rest up to the reader. The image in this case is a clear one, even though perhaps construed in shadow.

Well done.

[.quan.011.]

I enjoy this peom and the shortness is a plus

[A-Lovely-Anxiety]

beautiful as always. The short-ness brings more wanting, and now I want more. ;~;

[Uniqe In Many Ways]

I like this one...

[Ruth]

We are all but a shadow in this mist called life lol
Thought provoking poem hon, beautifully done!
xx

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

I like it!