Forever

He says he would like to Marry me

beneath

A weeping willow tree

The stars a witness to our binds

The moon a silent concubine

You'll say your words and I'll say mine

Hands and hearts forever intertwined

 

Is this your wish? My darling, my Heart

 

For us to wed and never part

 

Reviews

[Miss Coral]

Great piece... has a classical serenity to it. I love the rhyming scheme.. it was subtle and sweet, and felt as natural as could be. I do think that the last line could be tweaked a bit, as it felt as though it was tacked on to provide a finish.. otherwise.. excellent job. c:

-Coral-

[beatles1189]

beautiful. has a very classical feeling to it.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

'moon a silent concubine'..that line made me smile,it made me wonder what made you phrase such..i like how your words are so free and so edgy.I like the idea of marrying beneath weeping willow tree,that again made me wonder why you would phrase such.All in all very different and unique a read.

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

I really like this! its sweet and short!

[Poetic Shambles]

Short, sweet, emotive, poetic and all round rather lovely

[Shelby. Loves ya. :3]

wow. This is amazing like all your work.

[Elwina]

Beautifully penned, with such intensity, yet serene, in so few words. Amazing.
I loved the imagery.

[Poetry Girl]

this is a nice poem. it like you want to make sure this is what he wants to because it sounds... well it sounds really great and peaceful. well written!

[Norma M Sutton]

Short, dreamy in the way it's written.