Obsessed

I miss you.

 

but I must admit

that I'm relieved

you can't see me like this.

 

My hair a tangled mess,

Curling around my face

and pillows

My eyes ringed with

exhaustion

 

I can't draw myself out

of this mind state

tapping wildly at the

keys

I take fiteen minute

breaks

 

rinse, repeat.

 

I smile at my creation,

adding, deleting,

and I can't help but

think

This is completely

unhealthy.

 

Author's Note

Since my boyfriend left thursday morning, I began my little attempt at writing a book, Burn Away has engulfed all of my time, thankfully I've been too sick to work, or I might just lose my job. :)

Reviews

[Ashesh]

Desperation is vivid. The process is hard to write such writings. There is chaos going inside and none of the words seem to do justice to the feelings. Good effort.. I loved reading it!

[Tate Morgan]

Hair a mess i bet you are still adorable

[Poetry Girl]

everyone has to do their own little things to get their minds off the ones that they miss :) haha good thing you have an excuse not to go to work, and you get time to work on this book of yours. good poem! i liked it a lot. its very simples though. but well written

[Bard Constantine]

We have to do something to keep the madness at bay... or we'd be a nervous wreak for truth, or at least I would. Nicely written, something I can relate to...

[Pax Analog]

What is especially touching is the wry humor emerging from the relative wrack and ruin.

"I can't draw myself out/of this mind state/tapping wildly at the/keys/I take fifteen minute breaks/rinse, repeat."

What a charmingly funny placement of "rinse, repeat"! ;-)

"I smile at my creation,/adding, deleting,/and I can't help but/think/This is completely/unhealthy."

A closing note of wistful irony, as it is indeed healthy to express whatever it is we are experiencing, an unhealthy obsession rendered droll in the telling.

Charming and brave.

[Ramiz Ilham Khan]

I smiled at the end. Good work.

[Honestly, Abe]

I absolutely love the last stanza! The idea of smiling at what you know is unhealthy for you sent goosebumps on my arm. Definitely an awesome conclusion for me as the reader.

[Norma M Sutton]

It's a interesting way to look at it.

[Anas]

Very "Emotionful"! It will get better with you :)
and umm I Liked it xD

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

I'm sorry for your loss. but.. i guess something good came out of it, huh? It will get better.