Spinning.

And beneath the layers
{hidden}
Behind a steel barricade

Is my broken, withered heart.

A clutter of shattered pieces lie in a
pathetic heap.

...I Sigh...

And the cage rattles.





I think I can hear your heart beating

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

The image recalls a film of dark kink called The Pet.

The poem recalls the rattling ways of human interactions.

I wonder if the Spinning of the title would enliven the poet's "broken, withered heart."

Usually "Who rattled your cage" refers to a flare-up.

Hearing the other's heartbeat offers a key of possible hope. The cage may open; the heart may heal.

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot of emotion in this short poem. Easy to be caged-up and lost in the emotion of the heart. I like the last two lines. Always some hope even in the saddest of hearts. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Well you know I'm a fan of using few words to convey strong emotion. I like this.

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

I love this. Very very good.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Even the strongest wall can fall from the power of love... I love the symbolic nature of this poem.

[M.Kilani]

I love it !!

[.quan.011.]

Wow, there is a lot of emotion in this poem.

[nono]

Ring around the rosy...pocket full of posies ashes ashes we all fall down!!! lol
Remember that spinning around. Too Funny!
Anyway this is beautiful I see you took your time and just wanted to create an imagery to make the reader see what you want them to! And I did
Nicely done!

[Brittany W]

ahh, how i loved this, so raw and emotional, i loved every line.

[Matthews Reggie]

wonderful comparison... excellent poem...

[Crinkle°]

a very strong metaphor.