Distant

I close my eyes

 

So I can see

the colors

 

swirling and reaching

out

 

into

some unknown

 

distance

 

A Kaleidescope

of shaded

 memories

 

s t r e t c h

 

into torturous immensity

 

My

heart

breaks

with each

pulsing beat

of remembrance

 

crumbling down and down

deep

down

into my soul

And I know

 

she's still

screaming

louder

but its just that sweet and simple

humming

 

in my ears

 

ear drums

 

bursting

out with

chords and fractures of

self.mutilation

 

I'm breaking the sound barrier

.it burns.

Hurts

so exsquisitly

The blood is pulsing down

down my veins

 

There isn't a release

not.any.more

 

If there ever has been

I never knew

 

God, I swear

 

I never knew

what it was I'm really here to do

 

I gave up

so easily, I didn't even

find the missing

piece.

 

Then you told me,

in blatant

 

condescendence

 

that its just lieing

there

on the floor,

just right there on

the floor

 

My eyes

they were color blind

and I never tried to open them wide

 

Just a

little

wider

 

I cracked the door

open

to see what was out side

because

I had never really

wondered

that before

 

before what happened,

happened

 

my mind raced with

wonder

 

and then I saw the

branches

Her eyes up in the trees,

 

gleaming and

Golden

 

Like that light I saw once

so far up in the sky

 

And my Lord,

 

I swear she

was looking right at me

 

When I was standing there behind

the door

 

It was red,

the color of rabbits blood

 

stained and chipping off

the wood

 

And I saw a

round white

moon

 

Hanging in a southern sky

Blanketing a distant mountain

 

Like a dream

 

But I saw it with my eyes.

Author's Note

*edited* I know its long. is it too much?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for the beautiful poem. I like the places you took me with your words. The many statements stood out in your poem. Sometime we can see forever and sometime we can see too much.
"Hanging in a southern sky
Blanketing a distant mountain
Like a dream
But I saw it with my eyes."
A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[al25]

Very well written again. This poem is really effective because of the set up and wording you use. Great job.

[Martina]

It's simple yet has so much depth to it. I can feel how much emotion was put into it. I loved this, I'm a masochist and most of my poems are about heartbreak and love. So this fits right in, haha. Love can find a way back into our lives though, thankfully.. even if for a brief time.
Great write, I look forward to reading more!

[Sports Girl]

No it's not to long. It's a lovely poem. I enjoyed reading it.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

gorgeous intensity unwinds the length of the poetic~ the length enriches it~ =)~

[Ruth]

I think a poem is long as it needs to be love, never let anyone dishearten you in regards to that! lol
This is awesome and I loved the stretch on s t r e t c h lol
Awesome!
xx

[loowzerX]

nah it's not too long, because it's flowy enough to forget it's length :) another geat piece from you flower!

[Miss Coral]

I don't think it's too much.. the imagery was powerful. Nice write.
I would suggest looking over for spelling mistakes/ typos though.
Good piece.

[Cynthia]

Well, as long as it is good, it won't mind if it is long!

[Norma M Sutton]

I think the length is fine. Did you mean to spell kaleidescope with a c?