Unrobed

Don't hide my imperfections

Peel off the mask

Like vapor, extinguishing

the impetuosity

Leave me breath...less...

As you carefully remove

the meager gause

of my self

My pain and childhood

erased

and replaced

with soft redemption

My pagan robes fall

quietly

to the ground

And take my curves,

my woman hood

Those pale blue eyes

a mockery

of adolescense

Leave me here

Naked

in the truest sense

So I can lay eyes upon

what is silently

beneath

Unsheath

before a mirror of

my own eyes

This silent mind

unravels

and releases

I can't see any thing

but time.

Reviews

[Jonathan De Elvira]

self beauty revealing...
"My pain and childhood
erased" sounds like soothing relief, in fact, I love that line :P

U have unique style of ur own, which is good n tht tempting gentle style of ur writing makes it better...
don't bury ur talent...u'll be great :)

[Ed Hart]

i like it that you can release yourself to be utterly used by the muse

[vincentbals]

lovely poem you've created here. thumbs up!

[Dream Weaver]

I echo Robins words...a truly magnificent
write...

[Robin]

wow, this may be the best I have read from you , definitely a favorite .
you create a storyline and fill it flawlessly with an excellent final reflective thought . you write beyond your years .