Time stood still

Across stale waters and

trembling seas

From brittle coasts and

climbing beasts

Through darkness and the

rivers wind

Implored throughout the

wane of time

No one is here to watch

them fall

No one is here, no one

at all

 

Emptied clouds and sordent rains

Buried cities with rusted chains

While the moon shines harsh and high

With broken hearts and thundered skies

Across the deserted lands of woe

within the caves with no echoes

 

No one is here, No one at all

No one was here to watch them fall

 

And so blood dries and

buildings fall

No one was here

No one at all

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sounds a lot like a country under nuclear attack... I know I got an erie feeling with the images this poem brought and that makes this a great poem.

[M.Kilani]

outstanding !! the flow was amazing, the Images were great and the repetition was wonderful !! somehow it reminds me of Dio's song Egypt(the chains are on) and pink Floyd's Goodbye blue sky !! I don't know why is that but it does !!
great piece, well done

[Matthews Reggie]

powerful imagery, repetition had an impactful effect....

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

excellent rhythmic flow~ composition strung like musical notes in soft cello weeping~

[Crinkle°]

I appreciate very much this one.

[Ruth]

Wow, this is excellent imagery love!
Your work always takes me on a journey of profound thought and study!
A beautiful poem that leaves me moved
xx

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I felt that this poem was written on an enormous scale.
There seemed to be desperation and sorrow bleeding out
from the cracks in the earth. Every living thing seemed to
have left its weeping in the air. Witnessing the disturbing
scenes, seemed to be the writing on the wall. I wanted to
know more, but at the same time I was comfortable with it
going unsaid. I didnt know if I could take it. I felt as if the
most important thing was to have the knowledge to not let
it happen again.

[Miss Coral]

Love the repetition- excellent write altogether. The imagery was beautiful and lonely, a world of things falling apart, and no one to witness. Loved it. Great write.

-Coral-

[Jonathan De Elvira]

this was meaningful..I can see that you had changed it though...

I liked this one better...the feelings of isolation was shown clearly...

[Jonathan De Elvira]

I love the first paragraph..
very rhythm-ish :P
u created the alone situation very well...
love this work from u...:)