Don't just bury me Alive

Put a gun to my head

and hear my heart pulse

like a drum

harder, faster, skipping beats

blood racing achingly through

veins, near bursting

I'm reaching the breaking point

and I think my mind has exhausted

all its strength

but I've never encountered

more than I can take

So push that pistol a little

closer to my face

Make me want this life

need it like I've never needed it before

air gasping in and out, lungs near

collapsing and I'm taking

the foil off the floor

burning it into my arms

Laughter echoes

like drums, I can hear you

strumming

but its so far, far away

I look down the barrel

but I don't feel any pain

So take my life

the way it is today

and I won't miss the sunshine

when I'm buried in my grave.

Reviews

[Nobody.]

Exactly. Love it!
Cheers!

[Poetry Girl]

"so take my life
the way it is today
and I won't miss the sunshine
when I'm buried in my grave"
those lines really stood out to me the most. im not sure why. but you did a great job. this was full of strong and sad emotions.

[Sweets]

Nice one. I really enjoyed reading this :)

[Robin]

apoplectic apathy

[Ruth]

This is so good love! Deal with the unproportioned disasters of life above the grave so there can be no melancholy below!
Awesome poem:)
xx

[Charles]

Nice depiction of the fight for survival.

[Pax Analog]

Kinky mind snuff.

After darkly erotic suspense, the poem kind of ends on a shrug tho'. Like, c'mon, baby, make me sweat for life -- but wait, I'm numbed-out/drugged-out and don't give a s**t, kill me now.

Make me want this life, make me want this death. Limbo rock in the twilight zone.

[M.Kilani]

BTW I'm going to share this with some friends on Facebook if you don't mind !!

[M.Kilani]

Good God !!
the desire of facing death in order to appreciate life !! that was one of my poem's theme !! forgot which one though !!
still this is much better !!

[Akshat♥]

it is different type of poem i have just seen...i just love the idea...ur thoughts..its amazing...nicelly written..tc:)