Cosmic Serpents

A mixing of dream images and myths...inspired by PoppySilver

 

 

Feathered serpent descends
dust rises from the ancient pyramid
dragon of gold with eyes like rubies
thirteen diamonds on her back

Rattlesnakes appear with the rising of the sun
from the east, seven snakes glowing like stars
from the west, six snakes dark like a moonless night

I hear the sound of a clear voice in my ears
"the long count has ended
put my feather in your hair
take up the sacred axe
the cosmic serpents have awakened"

 

 

Reviews

[writing mojo]

what a journey, this cosmic spirit could bring to us all, what's the sound a spirit makes before a strike? : a whisper, a whisper before nailing the skin, a warning before letting it sink in, you have outlined that moment before impact in this poem with perfection, with such venom, a whisper the cosmos are listening to amplifying in soul strung accords of this poem prophetic to the wound we feel coming on....amazing stuff

[Royal Phoenix]

pretty cool visually!!

[Omar Fendri]

the cosmic serpents have awakened ....
deep ... this is too deep.
Clueless images... Flummoxed description and it has a pulchritude in its ambiguity... I know pulchritude is an adjective for a physical beauty, especially for women, but that's exactly what I visioned... well, I visioned three different scenes... Just as much times I read it. Every time your words drive me to an exotic imagination.
well, this is perfect. je l'adore.

[Tenebrousoul]

Great! Absolutely wonderful! It has a Maya feel.

[Arielle Ann]

I visualized almost your desert when reading this...rattles are common there...however coming back to the write...it was like a spiritual awakening..."cosmic serpents have awakened"...snakes signify a lot in the religious as well as the real world...their motion, the ancient era tells us a lot about them..so nothing could be more convincing than serpents to convey a spiritual message...different and unique style of writing...I loved it :)

[BlueDreams]

A very different theme you have penned down here .. :-) Intriguing craft .. :-)

I felt in your desert.. very nice words, and captivating way you told this. Beautiful

[Hoskinsish]

I love your descriptive language.

[kmartell]

my friend at work is going on vacation again down to the yucatan and further into the jungle. she is chasing those things you talk about here.

i would love to follow her down but my volkswagon is broke down ha

this is well written. there is a nice rythm and beat to the way you write, the metaphor, images and the form and style of a written piece can carry the reader along. this, and many of your poems that i read seem to do that and so they are at once have that twoness that makes for a good poem or story

[johnnyqueer]

This is a really cool poem! I liked reading it :)