Demons Mind

another poem i thought up in bed last night

As i lay here,

Demons swirl around me.

Feeding of my anger and hatred.

I've become lost to this world.

But i still continue on,

For haveing and excistence is great.

I will just have to keep looking,

For my safe haven.

Demons gather to feast and devour my anger,

For this world.

My mind is becoming blocked by them.

A demon mind cares for only chaos and death.

Call me a demon then.

Reviews

[falling_toxic_rain]

torment and anger are greatly felt, although somewhat of an optimistic view...somehow.-"but i still continue on," you haven't completely given in.
I really like it, its got a a flow, but the it's in need of fixing the typos.
-charlie

I like how it starts off with you stating that you're being tormented by demons but you can fight it, then near the end of the poem you seem to be overcome and have given up. Brilliant last line, by the way.

[NightDream]

This was really a good piece. But I was hung up a time or two because of spelling. Made it drag down just a bit. Over all I like it. Good Job