Chapter 1

     Eve Roberts, age 15 years, was an adventerous, intelligent and sharp daughter of a rich businessman William Roberts.She had large fiery blue eyes,waist length black hair, prominent jaw bone. After spending a week at her grandmother 's home she was returning home with her butler, Mr. Higgins.

                  "Mr. Higgins?" Eve said to get the attention of her butler.

                  "Yes, my Lady?" He asked looking at her.

                   "Have you informed Mom and Dad that I am comming back home?"

                    "It was the first thing I did in morning."

       Eve smiled looking out of the window, thinking of her little brother. Thinking how excited he would be as she would hand him his gifts. 

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          They were near the Roberts Mansion when Eve caught the sight of her father's friends.

                   "What are they ......?"

       But Mr. Higgins cut her off and said to the driver "Pete! Hide the car quick!"

            Then just in time Eve saw one of her father's friend put a pistol in his coat. Eve went numb. The men got into the car and sped away.

              Pete drove the car out of  the hiding and turned it towards the mansion. Mr. Higgins knew that Eve have seen every thing. The silence was dreadful.As the car crossed the open gates, they saw the security gaurd lying on the ground, dead. Eve,s heart started to race as she saw the corpse.

             The moment the car stopped, Eve jumped out of the car and ran inside the house. She ran through the entrance hall and checked every room on the ground floor, calling her parents and brother. No one answered. She ran upstairs, praying at the same time. She went to the first room on the left side. In that room she saw three bodies lying on the floor. She knew right away that it was too late. She went towards the corpses, tears streaming down her face, and sat down.

             "Mom.........."

            She couldn't see well. Every thing was getting blur..........

Author's Note

Please point out my mistakes and grammar problems.

Reviews

[Clayton Wulfric Fernand..]

I love your story's concept, and would love to read more!

Although, you really should pay attention to common spelling, and the change of tense is much to sudden.