Angel

Up above the sky so high..you fly
Guarding my heart from anyone else
When will you fall into my arms
You're the one I want to embrace
Angel your the one I love so much
Yes girl, its that forever kind
With the brown eyes so sweet on me
The beauty reminding me of the night sky
The sky you soar with elegance
Like a shooting star you shine with glory
Your love pouring out like rain
The wind that blows are your words of grace
Again baby the love I have for you, is that forever kind
Watching you soar so high in the sky,
Knowing I have my own angel to watch over me
To be by my side when im in need
Girl your my angel, longing to hold you
Hoping to ground you....to me.
Your sweetness is un-parallel
Kindness that show is so humbling
Everything you are, is what I need in my life
I need that angel on my shoulder
But you never leave it, always there
I cant describe much for an angel who knows it all
But when i lay down at night
Looking up at the sky and stars
Know that I love you..angel

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Almost has a fairy tale feel to it...I can feel the emotion and the power in your poetic voice, and that is quite moving (as always). I like a lot of the imagery; the sky imagery lends itself to a sort of otherworldly, cosmic balance. Only suggestion would be to stay away from lines like "Up above the sky so high", because it is so recognizeable; just a little rephrasing. Anyway...a nice write, my friend.

[s y e]

This is so romantic and sweet! I love it. You're going to have all the girls swooning over this one. Your description is beautifully written. Very nice.

There a few grammatical errors and although I am rubbish at punctuation I think it would help your poem to flow just a teeny bit better - that's just my opinion which isn't always great!

Great poem though.

[Derek Smith]

Yea this was old that's why I haven't gone through it for the whole grammar so I might have a few things for that

[I Am Svetlana]

The power of love can easily grab such a hold on someone, but if with the right person, it'll be worth it and our efforts will pay off. It's such a push pull emotion, but constantly it's an uphill battle. Then, it's like a vertical drop 50 feet down. It's different for everyone, the power and technique of this feeling, but glad you are expressing such positive thoughts about another, instead of negative. Shows you are on the right track and that you've found yourself a true woman.

[Derek Smith]

I thought I did at the time lol. Didn't work out to well

[I Am Svetlana]

May I ask what happened? We can talk about it if you want...

[Derek Smith]

She was a liar and unfaithful. Now we are getting divorced. Not much to talk about really

[A. Amos]

This is one alive piece of art, you're God gifted my friend.

[Derek Smith]

Thanks I really appreciate that

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is downright adorable. Great job.

[Derek Smith]

Thank you :)

[Blank]

Aw, this is very sweet with a very raw emotion showing through. You're very good with articulation and the characteristics you notice and point out speak volumes as to the depth of the piece. Very nice write, thank you for sharing!

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was beautiful, Derek. She sounds angelic :)

[Derek Smith]

Thank you; she really is :)