An Absent Heart

Is there a place where the heart aches at the thought of us apart?
 
There was a day where love burned passion afloat.
 
Now that day has turned to darkened night.
 
Blasting those golden dreams that once where to shadows.
 
The heart has grown a hole that you can’t replace; even with greatest of efforts.
 
That part no longer exists; without you the mind is at calm.
 
Where that hole grows it fills with pleasure of thought of a new piece to fill.
 
A new life to grow into it allows for peace to finally be bestowed upon me.
 
The heart ached with the pain of the resentment you filled it with.
 
The pain clawing from the inside out, slowly it came unnoticed.
 
Finally it could take it no longer, and now smiles with the emptiness that remains.
 
Who knew a heart could take pleasure in absence.
 
You’re without; I’m without and could not take any more pleasure with it.
 
This heart will not grow fond, nor ache without your presence.
 
There is not a place or time where this heart will feel pain.
 
You do not know this heart anymore; thoughts remain if you ever had.

Reviews

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was just WOW. Very nice and I can easily relate. xo Winter

[emilyfulken]

wow, excellent poetry. very strong and emotional. spoken from deep within. very moving. excellent flow.
really enjoyed reading your poem. thank you for sharing this.

[Derek Smith]

Thanks for the review I'm glad someone else enjoyed this aswell. Hope I can have more to grab your interests again

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Now this one has a great flow, as well as a great concept. I like the way that you speak to the "you" in this one, and the emotions are also quite strong. Formatting is also nice in this one, though I might suggest breaking it in the middle into two stanzas, because I see a natural transition half way through. Overall...nicely done.

[Derek Smith]

Hey thanks I'm glad you enjoyed it. I usually do free verse I haven't really broke my poems up they usually just run on. But it is an good suggestion I appreciate that :)

[S.C.]

This is amazing. I really love this poem. You did a great job :)

[Derek Smith]

thanks I'm glad you did, that's the main reason for my writing :) put a smile on someone elses face

[S.C.]

That is a great reason for writing.

[Derek Smith]

today it happened so today is a good day :)

[S.C.]

Well that's good. Good days can be hard to find for some.

[Derek Smith]

indeed they sure can

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Interesting, what happens when the heart aches is actually the spirit that feels lonely and in an effort to fill that gap it could attract different type of spirits. For example the spirit of revenge, the spirit of depression, or the spirit of jealousy.

[Derek Smith]

Thanks for the review. Insightful