Apple Crisp

lol one of my favorite desserts

I love nothing more than to walk into the kitchen

on a cool summer afternoon

and smell the sweet, cinnamon apple fragrance

floating from nana's oven

to wait that long hour

and watch carmel drizzle

over the top

let it cool for a half an hour

a scoop of ice cream....

or a swirl of cool whip

fork in hand...

slowly floating towards my lips

and as the sugary taste invades my mouth

almost better than sex...

I

can't wait to have another bite.

Author's Note

It's been a while i know i'm rusty...but give it to me straight.

Reviews

[Angel's Lady]

Dang, Danni, made me think of sex! Very descriptive! Beautiful job!

[Jason]

ok ill give it to you straight this piece could be great!, because it is different yet everyone can relate to having a favorite meal made just for them. The begining was great but you lost something at the end ( more description). Talk of the ice cream melting over the warm apple crisp, talk of the dance between hot and cold on your in your mouth etc.... but over all good start.

"I love nothing more than to walk into the kitchen

on a cool summer afternoon

and smell the sweet, cinnamon apple fragrance

floating from nana's oven"


Thanks