What is suicide

A free write poem

What is suicide?

What is suicide?

Is it freedom?

Is it regret?

What is suicide?

 

Years of pinned up feelings,

To be reveal through a single letter.

A last resort, or the first chance to escape.

What is suicide?

 

The absence of a voice, which could not be found.

The result of being ignored for years,

Who is to blame?

A bully, the negligence of a parent, or the lack of support?

What is suicide?

 

The end result the same,

A tragedy,

A life comes to an impending end,

Without a chance to reveal their voice.

 

Author's Note

This is unedited, and just a free write. But I thought I would post it anyways.

Reviews

[Don't just B, but B ama..]

Very, very DEEP piece, which sadly due to my bipolar I can TOTALLY relate. These are magnificent questions. NEVER GIVE UP! There is always hope is my message on my sites, I surely will be sharing this piece via, twitter, google+, etc... Thank you for sharing this wonderfully written thinker. You may like my "Dying every Second" piece.
I also LOVE the "impending" end if taken in this light (of something bad) loom. "danger of the end impends" not exactly but some rewording of it may be in order. All in all, EXCELLENT.

[Vawn]

Haha ya I kind of need to edit this piece when I get the chance, but I'm glad you like it! :) and will surely check out your piece, right after this.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

People say only week people commit suicide...but no one even tries to judge the mental state of the deceased ...he/she might have been going through severe trauma....I wish people could spare few minutes for a talk with depressed person rather than having regret and cursing the deceased.....
Nice poem anyway...good job

[Vawn]

Ya the sad part is people, don't know how much these "weak" people are going through. Suicide isn't the best way out, but at that time most think it is. I suffer from depression and was lucky enough to find my voice, through writing and a very worrisome girlfriend. But most people aren't lucky. Sometimes I imagine what type of person the world is missing out on. Was it the doctor who finds the cure for a disease, or a politician that would change the world for the better. Sadly we will never get to see what these "weak" people could have accomplish...

-Vawn

[Gee]

Interesting little poem,good job

[Vawn]

Thank you!

-Vawn

[Katie]

That is certainly an interesting way of looking at suicide.

[Vawn]

Lol I don't know if that's good or bad, but I'm gone just take it as good! :)

[Nusquam Esse]

It should be 'revealed' rather than 'reveal', and I am not sure about your choice of impending in the final stanza. Impending would mean something which is drawing near, but the whole nature of this poem and the tense you use seems to imply that it is not just approaching. Also note, that poetry does not require punctuation on every line; in fact, punctuation is usually used only to clarify meaning or for stylistic effect, impacting the pace of a line. Of course having punctuation is not wrong, but if overdone, it can impede the impressions of a poem. As for the theme of the poem itself, I think this is something that many of us can relate to on some level, although what it is for us varies wildly. I however, did enjoy your final stanza; the conclusion that you reached... that despite a final letter to voice those things kept inside, they ultimately never have a chance to show their voice. Which is probably why, even after reading those notes, people in their life still cannot understand the why. I think the use of reiteration was well done in this one, really helps set the mood.

[Vawn]

Ya I personally know there's plenty of mistakes in this poem. I never really like poetry, or writing period to began with. But I thought I take your advice and venture into other types of writing. To help me become a better writer, so thank you for the feedback