blue smiles

blue is wonderful

In days of tepid excellence smiles
flood our faces,
in moments of wind tenderness we
graces those fields.
We reach down deep our heart and
ignite our delight.
And sniff in relief the air golden-lit
by sunshine.
On crispy debris that flakes we
walked to peaky places.
And feel the immersion of wind and
sunshine as it bless us in grace.
Look up my dear the sky awaits,
blue is smiling with tint of cushy
sunshine beige.
of the whiz of the wind as it braces
the ornates plant,
that blesses our fields in this gaily
flare,
beauty speaketh and we heard,
delight oh! It sprites.
Amidst its beautiful flowers, blue
does smile.
To the ocean we march to have a
good time,
in transparency peeks the glistening
fishes aglide,
in the belly of the vast blue they
bless us with sight,
as we sail over letting blue smile.
We look down, blue smiles; we
smile back, what delight.
The admiration of ocean exaltation
in everyone's mind.
all around the world blue smiles in
various afairs,
in bits or fully its our sights they
pleases.
Blue smiles in shimmering lights its
what we admire.
All over the world blue floods us
with smiles.

Reviews

[kingblaq]

You just lit up my day! Thanks for the wonderful poem and a great mind...'blue smiles'

[The XYZ Writer]

I absolutely loved this poem. You're a pro at describing. My favorite part was the ending; the part about the ocean. It really felt as if I was there. This poem is just what you'd need when you are feeling down.. It really gives us a soothing sensation. And like Archia, I like the title too. :)

[Archia]

I really loved reading the description it was so beautiful. I l enjoyed the different interweavings of blue as well. Oh and I really like the title as well, it fits so nicely.

[Coyote Poetry]

"beauty speaketh and we heard,
delight oh! It sprites.
Amidst its beautiful flowers, blue
does smile. "
A poem that create a positive emotion and hope. I like the description and the positive ending. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Undying Glory]

I'm really sorry I didn't review this one earlier. This was amazing work, extremely vivid and strong. I think what really struck me here was the depth of this great poem was how you could incorporate that phrase "blue smiles" into so many different contexts, now that is just awesome. This made me smile for sure! Great work here and keep the goods coming!

[Valentine]

There is nothing more beautiful than a deep blue sky with no clouds...it reminds me of my dad's eyes..Nice one..Valentine

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a joy that drifts across your poetic sky.. the beauty of the colors and the feel of the wind... This is a lifting song that gives the day hope!

[Dinesh Sairam]

Corrections: We reach deep down our heart, as they bless us.

And I think you used too much of uncommon words. Simplicity is always good. But, as the other comments say, this poem has such good positive energy flowing through it. A great attempt! Keep writing.

[Dev]

I'm glad I read this one... !!
I really like the use of metaphors and allegory. The only criticism I would have is regarding the spacing of the poem. You've shortened the sentences which according to me feels as though there's a pattern but because of the new lines, the flow breaks. Other than that it's really nice.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Interesting wordplay. A happy poem.